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Reply With Quotecouple spelling errors but other than that its a decent poem.definatly dif. keep it up ofelias! cant wait for the next one.
This poem was revised from an old poem I wrote. None the less it's essentially new. Hope everyone likes it ^-^
Rage is a curious thing,
love, even more curious.
Lovers that consume everything,
lovers that give everything.
Your hand blazing about through the air,
a thunderstorm dnacing on my face.
Wondering why, is that so bad?
Those words diving through my brain as I
sleep, the truth could it be?
Hours slipping from the time,
was it the way my back curved,
or the way my words were hot on the tounge.
It was always the
same once told.
In keeping our secrets,
may they be told to one precious soul.
Sever my tounge when I am forced to
speak in your presence.
What could be the words I would say.
Last edited by OfeliasFire; Jun 01, 2007 at 08:12 AM.
Dear Dinah...
couple spelling errors but other than that its a decent poem.definatly dif. keep it up ofelias! cant wait for the next one.
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Thank you ^-^ oh yeah sorry about the spelling errors...I was typing too fast. I should have looked over it better.
Dear Dinah...
Pretty good. Like angel said a few little spelling errors but good overall. Don't go so fast and watch what you type. And always make good use of the edit button. But you've done a greta job. Keep up the good work.
Our love will go on until the end of time. I will always be yours and you will be mine.
You did a great job with this poem I like it alot.
ナサン フォオツド
Keep what you hold dear close for one day they may be gone forever!
Make one person smile for it will continue to spread but if you make a frown that will spread as well.http://www.animeonline.net/gallery/s...0/ppuser/57173
Thankies ^-^...I didn't think it was one of my better ones, but oh well I guess.
Dear Dinah...
hey no problem I like to give advice and tell people when I like their work
ナサン フォオツド
Keep what you hold dear close for one day they may be gone forever!
Make one person smile for it will continue to spread but if you make a frown that will spread as well.http://www.animeonline.net/gallery/s...0/ppuser/57173
Well thank you much ^-^. I am actually working on another poem right now, so be looking out for it
Dear Dinah...
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