It's Been So Long

*Blade X* · Oct 27, 2006, 03:13 PM

It feels like I've laid still for too long,
I've been on my knees with my hands hanging,
My head has not looked up,
I've felt there was no hope left,
No sunlight will fall upon me.

My body felt so numb,
The cold pericing my skin,
Though the pain is dull,
But something made me look up,
That sweet voice and warmness you brought.

It's unbelievable what you've brought to me,
My eyes once so dead and hazed out,
They've given me a vision of beautiful,
Your flowing hair, bright eyes and beautiful smile,
I fear the same pain come again,
I fear I will go back to the way I once was.

Yet you freed me of my shackles,
Brought warmth to my body,
Made me feel secured,
I hold onto you and never want to let go,
For the same eternity I've spent in pain,
I want to spend it in love.

bin so long since i've written a poem XD anyways commetn and enjoy it

*Mr. K* · Oct 27, 2006, 04:36 PM

:P Not your best poem Jason~ Why~ Because its a talking kinda poem. Out loud, not in head kinda thing~

But I like it. :P Its different.

*ketaro* · Oct 27, 2006, 07:18 PM

I like your poem Blade X, it kinda reminds me of my youth.

*Blade X* · Oct 29, 2006, 01:14 AM

oh well, i've tried to write from the heart and stuff. it's bin awhile since i've written a poem and all >.< i only can say tht i tried

*Kasai* · Oct 29, 2006, 06:02 AM

My head has not looked up

I really dont like that verse. Other than that? I could visualize the poem, good job.

rksamurai · Oct 30, 2006, 01:45 PM

I really thought this poem was interesting... I like your use of words... This is really deep..

redeyed_impure_soul · Oct 30, 2006, 07:23 PM

It's a nice poem Jason. ^_^ Very deep and meaningful.

Oct 27, 2006, 03:13 PM	#1 (permalink)
Blade X AO's Demon Slayer Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Protecting my loved one. Posts: 1,606 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,446	It's Been So Long It feels like I've laid still for too long, I've been on my knees with my hands hanging, My head has not looked up, I've felt there was no hope left, No sunlight will fall upon me. My body felt so numb, The cold pericing my skin, Though the pain is dull, But something made me look up, That sweet voice and warmness you brought. It's unbelievable what you've brought to me, My eyes once so dead and hazed out, They've given me a vision of beautiful, Your flowing hair, bright eyes and beautiful smile, I fear the same pain come again, I fear I will go back to the way I once was. Yet you freed me of my shackles, Brought warmth to my body, Made me feel secured, I hold onto you and never want to let go, For the same eternity I've spent in pain, I want to spend it in love. bin so long since i've written a poem XD anyways commetn and enjoy it __________________ Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra
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Mr. K THUMBSUCKING ADDICTION Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Alaska Posts: 1,266 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 3,203	Re: It's Been So Long :P Not your best poem Jason~ Why~ Because its a talking kinda poem. Out loud, not in head kinda thing~ But I like it. :P Its different. __________________ ≥°≤ [?] █▓▒░░▒▓█ [?] ≥°≤ ◕ ◡ ◕;;;;[?]
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ketaro kitty Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 4,221 Thanks: 27 Thanked 31 Times in 29 Posts Credits: 23,188	Re: It's Been So Long I like your poem Blade X, it kinda reminds me of my youth.
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Blade X AO's Demon Slayer Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Protecting my loved one. Posts: 1,606 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,446	Re: It's Been So Long oh well, i've tried to write from the heart and stuff. it's bin awhile since i've written a poem and all >.< i only can say tht i tried __________________ Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra
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Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,490	Re: It's Been So Long My head has not looked up I really dont like that verse. Other than that? I could visualize the poem, good job. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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rksamurai Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Within the arms of the one I love. Posts: 401 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,595	Re: It's Been So Long I really thought this poem was interesting... I like your use of words... This is really deep.. __________________ Thank you Lasura! My lover speaks; and he says, 'Arise my beloved my beautiful one and come!' -Song of Songs 2:10
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redeyed_impure_soul Newbie Join Date: May 2006 Location: Anywhere out of this world... Posts: 27 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,137	Re: It's Been So Long It's a nice poem Jason. ^_^ Very deep and meaningful. __________________ I can feel you all around me, thickening the air I'm breathing. Holding on to what I'm feeling, savoring this heart that's healing.
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