It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry.

NevesElocin · Feb 29, 2008, 10:57 AM

I'm not asking you to love me
Not begging you to care
We have that something special
How i've fallen in your snare

No can know
What I feel so strongly for you
When I'm in the light
I can't even speak to you

But the darkness hides a secret
Of the forbidden love we share
If she knew she would kill me

We both have someone special
Someone who can never know
A person we want to spend our lives with
But still...how did we come together

We weren't satisfied with the chaste love of our partner
The sweetness of their touch
We wanted something desperate
Something that was wrong

I know I'm taking the easy way out
But neither one of us wants to let go
On shaky ground we founded this relationship
Nothing will help this to grow

You must understand that i love him so
But my feelings for you run deep as well
I can't will them away
That would make me an empty shell

I'm stuck falling
Sinning
Betraying the one I love
Everyday...every moment

What I'm doing is so sick
But god only knows how fun
Its dirty but so intoxicating
Its dangerous and i love that thrill

Am I even human?
To betray someone this way?
To cause so much pain
Bring on so much suffering
For the sake of a few moments of pleasure each day

I was looking so despretly to fill a void that wasn't there
I need to pay for my sins
Atone for my error
I'm ready to confess
Ready to repent

I'm ready to die
To give back what I have taken away
I don't want to hurt him anymore
So here is the blade

I wanted to say this
Wanted to say goodbye
Maybe you'll see me on the other side
And maybe by then you will have forgiven me

Though disgusting I have proved to be
I do love you
The both of you
And my feelings were real

But all I wanted to say was goodbye
And I'm sorry...

aeonking · Mar 01, 2008, 04:34 AM

What an amazing poem it really touched me. Makes me think about some of my past relashionships.

Keep up the good work, i'd love to read another.

P.R. Princess · Mar 01, 2008, 07:11 AM

O_O
oh wow.

that was great. you really know how to express yourself. my only problem though was that the flow of it was a little difficult to get through it. but other than that it was great.

i felt so much emotion from reading it. its just great. keep up the great work.
^^

*koga23* · Mar 06, 2008, 05:51 PM

Defiantly not my type of poem, to sad and depressing. I wanna see happy and joyful ! Anyway other than the fact its depressing its pretty good, the flow might need a little work but i know you can better yourself

.

As always love the picture you add in the poem...

bratling · Mar 11, 2008, 07:54 AM

I really liked this poem. Although it didn't flow as nicely as I wished it would have I really got the overall feeling through it anyways.

Feb 29, 2008, 10:57 AM	#1 (permalink)
NevesElocin ~The Mistress~ Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: Hell Posts: 699 Thanks: 14 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 10,272	It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry. I'm not asking you to love me Not begging you to care We have that something special How i've fallen in your snare No can know What I feel so strongly for you When I'm in the light I can't even speak to you But the darkness hides a secret Of the forbidden love we share If she knew she would kill me We both have someone special Someone who can never know A person we want to spend our lives with But still...how did we come together We weren't satisfied with the chaste love of our partner The sweetness of their touch We wanted something desperate Something that was wrong I know I'm taking the easy way out But neither one of us wants to let go On shaky ground we founded this relationship Nothing will help this to grow You must understand that i love him so But my feelings for you run deep as well I can't will them away That would make me an empty shell I'm stuck falling Sinning Betraying the one I love Everyday...every moment What I'm doing is so sick But god only knows how fun Its dirty but so intoxicating Its dangerous and i love that thrill Am I even human? To betray someone this way? To cause so much pain Bring on so much suffering For the sake of a few moments of pleasure each day I was looking so despretly to fill a void that wasn't there I need to pay for my sins Atone for my error I'm ready to confess Ready to repent I'm ready to die To give back what I have taken away I don't want to hurt him anymore So here is the blade I wanted to say this Wanted to say goodbye Maybe you'll see me on the other side And maybe by then you will have forgiven me Though disgusting I have proved to be I do love you The both of you And my feelings were real But all I wanted to say was goodbye And I'm sorry... __________________ My love for you only grows with time...I want to create something beautiful with you.
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Mar 01, 2008, 04:34 AM	#2 (permalink)
aeonking Diamond in the Rough Join Date: May 2007 Location: In the shadows Posts: 231 Thanks: 3 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 2,651	Re: It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry. What an amazing poem it really touched me. Makes me think about some of my past relashionships. Keep up the good work, i'd love to read another. __________________
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Mar 01, 2008, 07:11 AM	#3 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 900 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 14,170	Re: It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry. O_O oh wow. that was great. you really know how to express yourself. my only problem though was that the flow of it was a little difficult to get through it. but other than that it was great. i felt so much emotion from reading it. its just great. keep up the great work. ^^ __________________ ~GUNSLINGER~A7X=MIA~ ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~ ~I give my heart and everything to my sailor~
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Mar 06, 2008, 05:51 PM	#4 (permalink)
koga23 ~The Master~ Join Date: May 2005 Location: Massachusetts Posts: 2,155 Thanks: 3 Thanked 11 Times in 10 Posts Credits: 18,111	Re: It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry. Defiantly not my type of poem, to sad and depressing. I wanna see happy and joyful ! Anyway other than the fact its depressing its pretty good, the flow might need a little work but i know you can better yourself . As always love the picture you add in the poem... __________________ ....Player Killer.... † " There Is Nothing To Fear But F.E.A.R It Self "- (F.E.A.R) †
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Mar 11, 2008, 07:54 AM	#5 (permalink)
bratling Devoted Otaku Join Date: May 2007 Location: Crystal Minnesota. Posts: 511 Thanks: 0 Thanked 19 Times in 18 Posts Credits: 11,945	Re: It's no big deal,really. Break my heart. Let me down. Make me Cry. I really liked this poem. Although it didn't flow as nicely as I wished it would have I really got the overall feeling through it anyways. __________________ She's always trying not to cry. But I can see the demons in her eyes. She's always trying not to yell. But you see to her, she's trapped in hell.
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