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    sad and alone

    everything happy everything glad
    theses are things i have never hade
    always lonely always sad theses are things i have always hade
    alone and sad i have always known
    never to be glad it is something on it's own
    things that are happy things that are glad
    they are things that i wont ever have
    sad and alone is all I know
    never to be happy
    it is somethingi knew long ago


    i dont know if it any good but that is me

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    Re: sad and alone

    hmmm.... it's a nice poem, I like it, the only thing is that it was hard for me to read it because of some mistakes and the lack of punctuation, still it couldn't ruin the mood of it... The sad and lonely mood in witch I could find myself...

    A nice work you've done here, but I know you can do better ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: sad and alone

    okay thatnk you and i did think i missed alot of the punctuations like you said but couldnt remember at the time i wrote it

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    Re: sad and alone

    I enjoyed the poem alot. Like what Lasura said the punctuation didn't ruin the mood. ^^
    Your soul is mine.

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