sad and alone

runebearer00 · Jul 24, 2007, 08:04 PM

everything happy everything glad
theses are things i have never hade
always lonely always sad theses are things i have always hade
alone and sad i have always known
never to be glad it is something on it's own
things that are happy things that are glad
they are things that i wont ever have
sad and alone is all I know
never to be happy
it is somethingi knew long ago

i dont know if it any good but that is me

*Lasura* · Jul 25, 2007, 02:39 AM

hmmm.... it's a nice poem, I like it, the only thing is that it was hard for me to read it because of some mistakes and the lack of punctuation, still it couldn't ruin the mood of it... The sad and lonely mood in witch I could find myself...

A nice work you've done here, but I know you can do better ^^

runebearer00 · Jul 25, 2007, 09:24 AM

okay thatnk you and i did think i missed alot of the punctuations like you said but couldnt remember at the time i wrote it

theblackmist · Jul 25, 2007, 10:32 PM

I enjoyed the poem alot. Like what Lasura said the punctuation didn't ruin the mood. ^^

Jul 24, 2007, 08:04 PM	#1 (permalink)
runebearer00 Newbie Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: The realm of Darkness Posts: 42 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,870	sad and alone everything happy everything glad theses are things i have never hade always lonely always sad theses are things i have always hade alone and sad i have always known never to be glad it is something on it's own things that are happy things that are glad they are things that i wont ever have sad and alone is all I know never to be happy it is somethingi knew long ago i dont know if it any good but that is me __________________ *In the Darkness i walk alone..........* sig by Akura13
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Jul 25, 2007, 02:39 AM	#2 (permalink)
Lasura Angelic Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In a Demon's Arms Posts: 1,866 Thanks: 56 Thanked 32 Times in 30 Posts Credits: 49,192	Re: sad and alone hmmm.... it's a nice poem, I like it, the only thing is that it was hard for me to read it because of some mistakes and the lack of punctuation, still it couldn't ruin the mood of it... The sad and lonely mood in witch I could find myself... A nice work you've done here, but I know you can do better ^^ __________________ My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge
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Jul 25, 2007, 09:24 AM	#3 (permalink)
runebearer00 Newbie Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: The realm of Darkness Posts: 42 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,870	Re: sad and alone okay thatnk you and i did think i missed alot of the punctuations like you said but couldnt remember at the time i wrote it __________________ *In the Darkness i walk alone..........* sig by Akura13
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Jul 25, 2007, 10:32 PM	#4 (permalink)
theblackmist Newbie Join Date: Jul 2007 Posts: 10 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 339	Re: sad and alone I enjoyed the poem alot. Like what Lasura said the punctuation didn't ruin the mood. ^^ __________________ Your soul is mine.
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