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    The sadness of the Ivory's

    As the finger tips slide gracefully across
    the ivory , a memory seems to come to
    mind like a black and white movie with no
    sound , a tear can be felt as the memory
    plays on , and as the ivory is touched
    more lovingly i sigh is let out.

    Moonlight reflects through the window
    as candle light flickers by the window,
    the silence is defining as echos in the
    room fill with sadness , time passes so slowly
    now as the melody never changes a heart
    aches for companionship.

    The room full of chill the fingers never
    waver from there intent to play out that
    lonelyness only the moon seems to realise
    the movie plays on now as they kiss and
    a hand goes to the waist and the embrace
    more passionate.

    The key strokes play out the scene so well
    as the ivory moves so slow and full of imagery
    a tear drops to the keys as they ache so much
    from loosing that which meant so much to them
    with a single sharp pain to the heart.

    Life filled with sadness and lonelyness makes
    the ivory seem so alive witg mourning as the movie
    plays its final clip and she falls from him still look into
    his eyes a picture that will never go away , as the melody
    slows so do the tears but the heart aches will never
    go away.

    this poem is a story/poem about how someone
    just fades away in the stillness of the night while
    playing by moonlight the imgaes of his lost love
    missing her so much that he plays for the memeorys to keep
    comming back because its the only thing he has left of something
    very specail.

    any comments or sugestions are welcomed
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    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: The sadness of the Ivory's

    Wow.... I'm sorry I have to wipe my tears away. That was so good. You let me feel your pain. You sould write like that more often I loved. Sorry I cant say more about it.

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    Re: The sadness of the Ivory's

    Oh wow!!! hat was the most perfect poem I have every READ!!!!!! Your such an amazing poetic!!!!!! So much inside that poem well to me so I hope to see more!
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    Re: The sadness of the Ivory's

    Such a beautiful poem and so romantic and yet so sad. I could imagine everything that was happening as I read it which made it more wonderful. Fantastic job on this and I look forward to reading your next one.
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    Re: The sadness of the Ivory's

    Hmmm... I like it... hmm... but why do you put so much feelings and everything in ivory? And what do you mean with ivory... an ivory item? I come to think about chess pieces, did I get it right- the game of life? chess?
    This is a quite sad poem and I might not understand it just because I try never to wallow in my memories...

    And a sugestion- don't give out this important information about what the poem is about just like that, I think people should earn it- let them think about it themselfes and then in the end, tell them if they're right 'bout what the poem is about... Well, you could at least mark the ending of the poem and the starting of your comment so I could stop and think for a while before reading what you've tried to say there...

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    Re: The sadness of the Ivory's

    true i wil do that nxt time my spacing is a bit bad but i can do that

    and thanks for everyones comments i really aprecaite them
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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