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    Saying Goodbye...

    Saying goodbye…

    I don’t sleep very much
    Because I stay up to feel your touch
    To talk to you
    And see what I should do

    But all I ever hear about
    Is your cheating on me again
    I try to hurt you back
    But cheating on you has no effect

    I don’t cheat on people
    It’s not who I am
    So why do you push me
    Past my limits, making me do so

    Why do you hurt me so
    Take my heart away
    And unlike you do
    I don’t regret ever loving you

    Maybe I just ain’t enough
    But hey, that’s alright
    I just wish you would have told me
    But I guess I gave you the benefit of the doubt

    I’m tired now though…
    Sick of all the lies
    Of the times I’ve tried
    To make you love me too

    I’m tired of hearing
    That you're cheating on me
    That you no longer love me

    I’m tired of trying
    To get you back
    To hurt you because of your love towards them

    I’m tired of caring
    About the pain I feel
    About if I loose you or not

    So since all I hear
    Is about them
    All my attempts to hurt you for it
    Fail miserably

    I give up
    I’m saying goodbye
    This is the end
    Oh... and I’ll try not to cry

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    WoW broken lover, you dont know how close that poem resembles my life!!

    that whole poem has happened to me with 3 differant girls , and i have to say that poem really hits the spot to make me feel that im not alone!!! thanks you seem great!!

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    Re: Saying Goodbye...

    Quote Originally Posted by SnoReaper View Post
    WoW broken lover, you dont know how close that poem resembles my life!!

    that whole poem has happened to me with 3 differant girls , and i have to say that poem really hits the spot to make me feel that im not alone!!! thanks you seem great!!

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    I'm sure if that's a good thing or not because it's my life.... I and don't wish my life on anyone.

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    Re: Saying Goodbye...

    sometimes broken lover you cant help but doing just that, anyways back to the poem yes? It is quite good I must say however there are a few grammar mistakes in it that I have spotted out. for instance
    I’m tired of hearing
    That you cheatin’ on me
    That you no longer love me

    I think you mean "That your cheatin' on me?
    and try to keep the stanzas the same lenght as well. anyways keep up the work broken lover I hope to see more from you
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