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    Sayonara Promise

    Under the tree of hill
    Setting aside the fields of emotions
    Looking upon the weary motions
    There she is standing by the tree
    Longing the day to end the thee

    Flawlessly swaying in the entangled desinty
    She ran through the fields of obscurity hoping to find him
    THe sunlight is fading into the dimless rim
    Leaving her in the abyss of restlessness
    There she said"Could it be the darkness?"

    Endless obscurity in her mind flawed like wind
    SHe was entangled in the past of their cherrished memories
    Flowing in the waves of uncertainty
    There he is standing in the fields of obscurity
    There he bade "sayonara" and inform here to be fateful to him
    Assuring the promise,there she bades farewell to his lover's rim
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
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    Re: Sayonara Promise

    Wow. You know you have evolved so much from where you were at even like eight months ago. This poem tells a lot more than many previous ones that were much longer, and it has more of a rhyme scheme to it which makes it more readable.

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    Re: Sayonara Promise

    Wow. You know you have evolved so much from where you were at even like eight months ago. This poem tells a lot more than many previous ones that were much longer, and it has more of a rhyme scheme to it which makes it more readable.
    A poem of my classmate motivates me to do this one.,..
    I was attempting to make a love story but it turns of I lacked of a love scene so it ended this way...
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
    http://i52.tinypic.com/zxa8pj.jpg[/IMG

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