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    Scarred soul

    Through my flesh, a scar appears

    A scar to remind me of my painful years

    My years of sweat, & days of stress

    nights with tears till I lay to rest

    With a scar this big I won't be the same

    This wound refused to heal, until you came

    You filled me up & made me whole

    You reminded me of my life & my future goal

    Love me, Hate me, Then love me again

    I'm am your difference from the other men

    My scarred soul is willing, but my flesh is weak

    From the curse revealed upon my cheek


    ......

    No faith, all I see is failure in my eyes

    So if I cry, then please know that I apoligize.

    I am strong without the guilt

    So please release me from the filth

    Purify me, I am the foul heart of man

    Make me clean, from inch to inch & gram to gram

    I love you, I truly do

    I just hope I can give the best to you

    Thankyou all for loving me

    You are my one & only family

    & what I say is straight from the heart

    I loved you from the end on to the start

    Farewell, friends & future wife

    It's time for me to go out & try to live this life.^_^

    Scarred soul is healed through hard times

    So I must stop.........cause I'm out of rhymes. lol Sorry.^_0


    Hope you like it. lol
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    Re: Scarred soul

    Wow Who knew you had it in ya.

    *Claps*

    Well Anyway It's impressive, so are you going to Make another Poem Or Is This all your gonna Do???

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    Re: Scarred soul

    Quote Originally Posted by Hokuro

    I'm am your difference from the other men

    Is that suppose to say defense? Sorry for being picky but i read it a thousand times and still couldn't figure out how "difference" would go in there.Maybe im just a little slow right now anyways it was really awesome! I enjoyed it a lot. My favorite one was the 2nd one though. Nice way to end it. Keep writing because im sure everyone would like to hear more from you!! Later.

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    Thankyou all for loving me

    You are my one & only family

    & what I say is straight from the heart

    I loved you from the end on to the start
    This is my favorite, I love your poems. Keep it up.~~

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    Re: Scarred soul

    hokuro-san! XD sounds like Himura kenshin's life!

    It's nice! keep it up! i hope for more~ baa~ ^^
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    Re: Scarred soul

    Oh dear... now how did I overlook this - Hokuro Poetry!!! >.< ^_^
    Lovely poem, it rhymes. ^_^ Such an innocent child you are, haha. Anywho, a few minor G/S errors, but nothing close to horrific.
    Kenshin ?

    My scarred soul is willing, but my flesh is weak
    I'm gonna borrow Pammy's word. Morbid!! MORBID!! hehe. ^^ I love a good visual quote. ^_^
    You maintained a good flow throughout the poem. YAY!
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    Honestly, I liked your first poem better.
    So I must stop.........cause I'm out of rhymes. lol Sorry.^_0
    Ahhh!!! What is this!? lol ^_^ You fool !!! Anywho nicely done.

    Overall I enjoyed reading these. Now go make more poems, haha. ^^

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    Re: Scarred soul

    awesome, it so deep. i loved it.
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    Re: Scarred soul

    as i said in the comment on your pik. i love you.
    the poem was amazing, so full of the hard truth, with love that tricks us to belive in it. and finally humor at the end, very well rounded poem, it touches base with a few different things. in only one poem you are very versatile. loved it simply put, awesome.

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