Scraps

Mechazawa · Oct 30, 2007, 06:29 PM

Me (A few weeks ago)
Unbalanced. Desperate
Worry, struggle, escape
Fear and hope battle
Alone

Me (Now-a-days)
Stronger. Hungry
Focusing, changing, readying
I won't waiver anymore
Determined

I was playing around with a couple different types of poems. None of them are meant to be very long, so I thought I would just lump them in one thread to save space.

Life
By
Zawa

Life is a pulse
Indefinite with every beat
Flourishing and faltering at every crossroad
Enjoy and endure until the end, when the beat stops

I altered a name poem, and used the word L-I-F-E to start each line of the poem instead of someone’s name. This was the poem I wrote to enter into the battle with Holderofthedark, but opted to go with the other for an "other worldly" reason.

Well tell me what you think of my scraps. ^__^

*RayMe* · Oct 30, 2007, 09:02 PM

Lol scraps ^^

they are short and the descriptive words tell alot..

very simple yet informative...though the info's are incomplete.. eeh.. you can't tell everything now right?

keep it up ^^ try more new styles

highteckdudu · Oct 31, 2007, 09:44 AM

Great job! I dont see you round here to offtern but then again i'm not here very often eiher! Great work though! cant wait to see more! keep it up!

Mechazawa · Oct 31, 2007, 02:54 PM

Thanks, I was only playing around with something and bam. This is what I came up with.

I'm not sure what you mean by the information being incomplete though? ?_?

Tifa Lockhart · Oct 31, 2007, 08:05 PM

A choppy but unique poem indeed! Not bad...I enjoy reading it. Keep it up! [;

*Lasura* · Nov 01, 2007, 11:41 AM

Hmmm... your "scraps" are better than some of my quite serious poems *giggles* but I must say the one you entered in the battle was better than this one... And the "Enjoy" one was better too (yea... I know it's totaly different

)

But these were interesting and I enjoyed reading them and hoping to see more as always

fireandice · Nov 01, 2007, 05:22 PM

Nice cinquain poem. I think you did a good job on them. It's a fun style to do. Keep up the good work.

Oct 30, 2007, 06:29 PM	#1 (permalink)
Mechazawa Otaku Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Inside my mind Posts: 337 Thanks: 1 Thanked 3 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 4,354	Scraps Me (A few weeks ago) Unbalanced. Desperate Worry, struggle, escape Fear and hope battle Alone Me (Now-a-days) Stronger. Hungry Focusing, changing, readying I won't waiver anymore Determined I was playing around with a couple different types of poems. None of them are meant to be very long, so I thought I would just lump them in one thread to save space. Life By Zawa Life is a pulse Indefinite with every beat Flourishing and faltering at every crossroad Enjoy and endure until the end, when the beat stops I altered a name poem, and used the word L-I-F-E to start each line of the poem instead of someone’s name. This was the poem I wrote to enter into the battle with Holderofthedark, but opted to go with the other for an "other worldly" reason. Well tell me what you think of my scraps. ^__^ __________________ I BELONG TO AN ANGEL NOW!
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Oct 30, 2007, 09:02 PM	#2 (permalink)
RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,606 Thanks: 55 Thanked 27 Times in 24 Posts Credits: 59,502	Re: Scraps Lol scraps ^^ they are short and the descriptive words tell alot.. very simple yet informative...though the info's are incomplete.. eeh.. you can't tell everything now right? keep it up ^^ try more new styles __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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highteckdudu Slippery When Wet~ Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: The wonderfull world of Minnesota! And I mean that! Posts: 628 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 17 Posts Credits: 157,450	Re: Scraps Great job! I dont see you round here to offtern but then again i'm not here very often eiher! Great work though! cant wait to see more! keep it up! __________________ I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass! Visit www.highteckdudu.deviantart.com!
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Oct 31, 2007, 02:54 PM	#4 (permalink)
Mechazawa Otaku Join Date: Jun 2007 Location: Inside my mind Posts: 337 Thanks: 1 Thanked 3 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 4,354	Re: Scraps Thanks, I was only playing around with something and bam. This is what I came up with. I'm not sure what you mean by the information being incomplete though? ?_? __________________ I BELONG TO AN ANGEL NOW!
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Tifa Lockhart Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Nibelheim Posts: 150 Thanks: 1 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 2,697	Re: Scraps A choppy but unique poem indeed! Not bad...I enjoy reading it. Keep it up! [;
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Nov 01, 2007, 11:41 AM	#6 (permalink)
Lasura Angelic Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In a Demon's Arms Posts: 1,872 Thanks: 56 Thanked 34 Times in 31 Posts Credits: 49,619	Re: Scraps Hmmm... your "scraps" are better than some of my quite serious poems giggles but I must say the one you entered in the battle was better than this one... And the "Enjoy" one was better too (yea... I know it's totaly different ) But these were interesting and I enjoyed reading them and hoping to see more as always __________________ My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge
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Nov 01, 2007, 05:22 PM	#7 (permalink)
fireandice ~always by your side~ Join Date: May 2007 Location: small little hick town Posts: 520 Thanks: 19 Thanked 17 Times in 17 Posts Credits: 10,856	Re: Scraps Nice cinquain poem. I think you did a good job on them. It's a fun style to do. Keep up the good work. __________________
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