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    Searching For Something

    Searching For Something

    Sitting on the cold floor of my prison
    Stairing out the barred window
    Wondering what life is like
    What is in the outside world

    Wiggling under the blankets
    Knowing tomorrow will be the day
    Tomorrow I'll try to escape
    To leave this prison I call my life behind

    Setting out on a journey
    A journey of my life
    Walking that long and empty road alone
    Never looking back to see if the decision was right

    Though there will be trials
    Obstacles that have to be over come
    Life will never get the best of me
    A helping hand will always be there

    Pure determination keeping my mind and soul strong
    Never faultering or second guessing the decisions made
    My prison far out of sight making it easier
    Now able to wonder alone in the world

    Searching through life
    Like searching for answers in a book
    Flipping through pages
    Looking for one thing to keep me together

    Never wanting to go back to my prison
    Also never wanting to live life alone
    Yet the jouney wanting to close
    Like a book ending a chapter so another can begin

    Finding the answers through love
    The prison that once bound me no longer there
    Now able to enjoy life to the fullest
    Taking it one chapter at a time


    I know alot needs to be done so give it your best shot at what needs to happen to make it a better poem.
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    Re: Searching For Something

    I really liked your poem. It was filled with alot of happy and sad emotions. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading your next one.
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    Re: Searching For Something

    Quote Originally Posted by CherryBlossom18 View Post
    I really liked your poem. It was filled with alot of happy and sad emotions. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading your next one.
    Thanks CherryBlossom your comments always lift my spirit when it's down. I needed that. I promise to have a better one next time though.
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    Re: Searching For Something

    Searching through life
    Like searching for answers in a book
    Flipping through pages
    Looking for one think to keep me together

    I like this poem, but in this stanza I think that the word think should be changed to things. I'm not sure if you meant to type it like that, but either way I understood what you were trying to say! Keep up the nice work Ky-lyrra!

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    Re: Searching For Something

    Quote Originally Posted by BlueFox1 View Post
    Searching through life
    Like searching for answers in a book
    Flipping through pages
    Looking for one think to keep me together

    I like this poem, but in this stanza I think that the word think should be changed to things. I'm not sure if you meant to type it like that, but either way I understood what you were trying to say! Keep up the nice work Ky-lyrra!
    Thanks for pointing that out to me thanks for the encouragement. I really enjoy all the encouragement I can get.
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    Re: Searching For Something

    Spelling and punctuation would do well for this poem.
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    Re: Searching For Something

    Anytime Ky-lyrra! AO is a place where writers can truly express their feelings and also be critiqued to become better writers! Keep up the good work!

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    Quote Originally Posted by BlueFox1 View Post
    Anytime Ky-lyrra! AO is a place where writers can truly express their feelings and also be critiqued to become better writers! Keep up the good work!
    One thing though people can critique my poems all they want but I have my style just like everyone else but thanks for the words.
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