In summer, in winter
in spring and in fall,
in bitter cold and pouring rain,
under the hottest sun and the moonless sky,
I dream of rivers,
running deep and flowing endlessly,
passing through hundreds of dreams
and thousands of regrets.
I dream of deserts,
tiny grains of despair, of terror,
of hope, all mixed together, countless.
Vast and empty, but perfect in a way, as always.
I dream of green, green grass,
of bare toes wiggling in dirt,
and rolling down hills as a child at play,
laughter and joy my truest, bluest friends.
I dream of night,
twilight turned to dusk turned to black,
a billion stars twinkling, fading, imploding, dying,
a million lives lived beneath them,
but just one that lives to keep
I don't usually post my works so closely together, but I wrote this in a frenzy of inspiration, and I like how it turned out.
Ohh same with me.. i like how it turned out too :laugh:
a very nice poem with very nice descriptions... imagery is real good :D
Yes I agree with you Ray ...such as she make a wonderful painting but with words ..
I like the descrapiton there ..well done..^^
I agree with both of you above me :laugh:
It's an awesome poem with really good description, I like the way you chose to write about the Seasons. Different ideas always are...simply wonderful!
Keep up the good work!
-x- Zainab -x-
Yea... O.o it's really good... I really, really like it. I find it great. The starting is wonderful- it just has this nice rhythm that, together with the listing of seasons and of desriptions of nature, create harmony.
And when you start to talk about dreams... it just creates wonderfull images in my head...
I really, really like this poem. ^^ Nice work!
It's amazing. This poem reminds me of a childhood story. x]
I love the imagery of this poem. <3
Keep up the fantastic work! ^^
I've enjoyed reading this poem, it has the imagery that captivates a reader. I also find the descriptive words interesting. I found myself in a dreamlike state while I was reading it, I felt that I touched and felt everything stated in this poem.
Stanzas would be nice though (only a suggestion =^_^=)
All in All, This is an awesome work Gren and may you keep up the good work.
After I wrote it, I considered separating it into stanzas, but decided not to. Now that I look it over again, stanzas would have been better, especially to separate the last line for effect.
Originally Posted by raja_psyche
I love the writing that comes from intense fatigue, from utter desperation, from the insane desire to create something truly amazing. It may not be the best, but I think it conveys the honesty and simple beauty that I was reaching for.
Thanks for the replies so far, all suggestions/comments are welcome!
EDIT: I edited the poem to stanza form, I really do like it better this way.