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    The secret crush

    THE SECRET CRUSH

    She'd known him her entire life
    She always dreamed to be his wife
    Just his smile made her heart melt
    But she never told him how she felt

    Forever hoped to have him here
    Always dreamed to hold him near
    Time passed and they both did grow
    But still she never let him know

    Perfect chances passed her by
    But she just couldn't tell this guy
    No matter what she'd ever do...
    He still didn't have a clue

    But one day her whole world did end
    When she heard news from a friend
    About the wreck he'd gotten in...
    She'd never see his smile again

    Now at his grave she softly cries
    The tears running from sad eyes
    This hurting girl whose heart is broken
    All because of love unspoken

    This is the first poem i post on this site.

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    Re: The secret crush

    it is a very good poem, it has many truths to it. and is very well written, but i would say to change this if you wish.

    one day her world did end

    When she heard news from a friend
    About the wreck he'd gotten in...
    She'd never see his smile again

    Now at his grave she softly cries
    The tears running from saddened eyes
    This hurting girl whose heart is broken
    All because of love unspoken

    but i love the ending it has lots of meaning.

    within the darkened realm of the mind, is endless shadows, wrenching pain, warming love, and burning desires.

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    Re: The secret crush

    This is very good! I hope to see you post more
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    Re: The secret crush

    Thank you guys. ^^ Drago, I'll think of it....^~^ =D

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