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Feb 10, 2007, 10:57 PM
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 Credits: 1,783 | Seven deadly sins I am sloth, see me yawn deep, Then leave me be, so I can sleep. I am greed, I want and I want, See all the stuff that I can flaunt. I am lust, see my desire, The heat I feel sets me on fire. I am pride; I am stronger than you, Wiser more daring and prettier too. I am envy; I want all you've got, Everyone has everything that I have not. I am gluttony, I eat and I eat, Chocolate, fruit and all kinds of meat. I am Wrath, and I feed off war, The blood and the guts, is what I adore. We are the sins, we total at seven, We are the sins that keep you from heaven. |
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Feb 10, 2007, 11:02 PM
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| Diamond in the Rough  | Re: Seven deadly sins(I think this poem will bore you) I like it... The rhyme is good, and I like that you matched the sins well with things that go with it to do so. It's not my favorite of yours, but it's still good. Keep them coming!!! I can't wait to read more!
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Feb 11, 2007, 04:03 PM
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Credits: 2,166 | Re: Seven deadly sins It was a good poem. Your rhyming was very good. I look forward to reading more.
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Credits: 11,126 | Re: Seven deadly sins Quote:
Good poem, but i dont like it. Those are basic human characteristics, theres no running from it. You cant tell some one to not be them selves..
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Feb 11, 2007, 11:02 PM
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Credits: 1,477 | Re: Seven deadly sins This poem is really good and interesting. I liked the rhyming pattern. You have a way of words. The poem seemed to be simple, yet it is worth reading. keep up the good job. The description for each deadly sins matched.
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Feb 12, 2007, 06:45 AM
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Credits: 85,184 | Re: Seven deadly sins I like this one alot! Very good word play, excellent rhyming. This one would have to be one of my favs.
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