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    Seven deadly sins

    I am sloth, see me yawn deep,
    Then leave me be, so I can sleep.


    I am greed, I want and I want,
    See all the stuff that I can flaunt.

    I am lust, see my desire,
    The heat I feel sets me on fire.

    I am pride; I am stronger than you,
    Wiser more daring and prettier too.

    I am envy; I want all you've got,
    Everyone has everything that I have not.

    I am gluttony, I eat and I eat,
    Chocolate, fruit and all kinds of meat.

    I am Wrath, and I feed off war,
    The blood and the guts, is what I adore.

    We are the sins, we total at seven,
    We are the sins that keep you from heaven.

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    Re: Seven deadly sins(I think this poem will bore you)

    I like it... The rhyme is good, and I like that you matched the sins well with things that go with it to do so. It's not my favorite of yours, but it's still good. Keep them coming!!! I can't wait to read more!

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    Re: Seven deadly sins

    It was a good poem. Your rhyming was very good. I look forward to reading more.
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    Re: Seven deadly sins

    Quote Originally Posted by flaminghate View Post
    I am sloth, see me yawn deep,
    Then leave me be, so I can sleep.


    I am greed, I want and I want,
    See all the stuff that I can flaunt.

    I am lust, see my desire,
    The heat I feel sets me on fire.

    I am pride; I am stronger than you,
    Wiser more daring and prettier too.

    I am envy; I want all you've got,
    Everyone has everything that I have not.

    I am gluttony, I eat and I eat,
    Chocolate, fruit and all kinds of meat.

    I am Wrath, and I feed off war,
    The blood and the guts, is what I adore.

    We are the sins, we total at seven,
    We are the sins that keep you from heaven.

    Good poem, but i dont like it. Those are basic human characteristics, theres no running from it. You cant tell some one to not be them selves..

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    Re: Seven deadly sins

    This poem is really good and interesting. I liked the rhyming pattern. You have a way of words. The poem seemed to be simple, yet it is worth reading. keep up the good job. The description for each deadly sins matched.

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    Re: Seven deadly sins

    I like this one alot! Very good word play, excellent rhyming. This one would have to be one of my favs.


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