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    Exclamation Sex Upstairs

    Their floor boards creeking.
    Bed-springs squeaking.

    To myself, Im talking....
    "Is that their headboard knocking?"

    Overcome by their rythmatic succession.
    I toss, I turn, I have indigestion.

    I hear some moans, so what do I do?
    Turn up the TV... to volume thirty two.

    But, my mission fails... in such disgrace.
    Instead of them stopping, they just pick up pace.

    This pillow over my head must be unappealing.
    But im protected from debris falling down from my ceiling.

    He's grunting. Shes panting. I cant take anymore!
    TV volume goes up... thirty three, thirty four....

    They finally stop. But it was all quite a pain.
    fourty five minutes of sleep down the drain.

    So a bit of advice, sorry if I seem tense.
    Don't have sex upstairs at your neighbors expense
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    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Sex Upstairs

    XD nice description... stick it up to ur neighbours door nicely done.. enjoyable..

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    Re: Sex Upstairs

    At first I saw on the RSS feeds just the title and I was getting worried.

    Overall, one of the best descriptive poems I have read, captured the mood really well. I love the sections about turning up the volume, add a feel of reality to it.
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    Re: Sex Upstairs

    Peach, this was a really funny poem.

    I think I'll make a poem to go well with this.

    I'll post the link here when I'm done.


    Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!

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    Re: Sex Upstairs

    Thanks everybody! And IlikeApples, I'd love to see a something like a comback, or sequel or whatever it is you have in mind... Sounds great, can't wait....
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    Re: Sex Upstairs

    Okay, this follow-up poem shows a different point of view.

    Wasted Effort


    Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!

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    Re: Sex Upstairs

    I've had the same experience; it's always worst on hot summer nights when the window is open. Your rhyme scheme and stanza structure are wonderful, and I don't even know where to begin praising the wittiness and originality of this poem.

    My only advice...Your title is a little too obvious; the poem would be that much more fun and surprising if you didn't use the title to explain it completely. Also, keep an eye on your spelling and punctuation.
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    Re: Sex Upstairs

    haha thats a cool poem minds me of my nabor on whom i am scread off ~_~ pervi bas****
    but yeah he keeps u up all night and its really anouying

    but anyways coolies poem

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