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    Shameless Ardor

    The soft brush of fingers against my cheek
    Sends a brief wave of heat to my toes.
    A soft burning in my core begs to be stroked,
    To be coaxed into a raging flame.

    My cold ashen features portray inanimation,
    Only the promise of scorching heat imitates life.
    A melodious sigh exhaled from chapped lips,
    Escapes into the silent presence of need.

    A saccharine warmth invaded my essence,
    Forced through a captured mouth that is mine.
    The quiet burning of my core
    Ignites to an incinerating passsion.

    Another's touch brings color to my skin,
    And an affirmation of life.
    The eagerness to sastify is quelled by attainment,
    The knowledge of love.


    This is my latest poem. Hopefully I'll recieve good criticism.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    YAY! first reply! anyway, it's good. i like it it does seem a bit short though. . . . .but that doesn't matter much.

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    Re: Shameless Ardor

    Very good me likes alot


    OH YAH...SECOND REPLY

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    Re: Shameless Ardor

    Why so short??? I like it. Even thou you want some criticism. I have none to say. I Like this.
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