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    Shattered December

    I kept silent and it rained for days,
    My insides were drenched,
    But I guess that's the part of growing up,
    I never wanted to learn.

    So I grew into the man that you never knew,
    But I wouldn't be the same if it wasn't for you,
    A hundred "Thank you's".
    If this is love,
    Then fairy tales come true,
    Judies are black in full bloom,
    And I died in the womb.

    Take it back,
    All that's yours,
    It's all still there like you left it.
    December stayed the same,
    Nothing ever changed but you,
    Nothing ever changed but you.

    Every dream is covered in dents,
    Love can't fly tonight,
    Couples will rest,
    I'll be sleepless.
    Cry yourself to sleep,
    This is about broken hearts,
    This is about me,
    bending again for nothing.

    I run to you but pain awaits,
    I'm coming home but I'll be late,
    No deeper than imagination can be,
    Sight with nothing to see.

    What's faith if I can't believe?
    It's everything,
    A cure,
    But I make it a disease.

    God take me,
    Because I hate me....

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    Re: Shattered December

    wat a sad poem...well it did to me. anyhow it was really really good. keep up the good work.


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    Re: Shattered December

    If this is love,
    Then fairy tales come true,
    Judies are black in full bloom,
    And I died in the womb.
    Nicely done!
    And excellent title to attract ppl too ^_^
    there was a repetition in the 3rd stanza and well...it seemed to have ruin part of the poem ^^''""
    Anyways...great work

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    Re: Shattered December

    Quote Originally Posted by elie26
    Nicely done!
    And excellent title to attract ppl too ^_^
    there was a repetition in the 3rd stanza and well...it seemed to have ruin part of the poem ^^''""
    Anyways...great work
    lol It's a song. So that's the reason "Nothing ever changed but you" was repeated. Thanks for your reply though. Well, onto other business...

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    Re: Shattered December

    Wow,it's really good Vincent.It was sad but at the say time wonderful.I loved it. Can't wait 2 see what you come up with next.
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    Re: Shattered December

    Very well done... Hope there will be some tune to guide us next time next time...

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    Re: Shattered December

    awesome poem i have read it sevral times
    and i even saved it to read again later
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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