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    She.....

    She, the purity of a princess, that casts upon me an undeniable affection.
    She, a rare golden treasure I once began searching for and have finally found.
    She, the swift, vigerous warmth of the refreshing air breeze bedding itself throughout my undoubtful, unclouded cheeks, clearing them, chanting out "yet there is hope........ always".
    She the star shining angel emerging from the delicate sky above, granting a wish, the chance that there will be forever something more than special to hold onto.
    She, of whom brightens, as always a day like no other, a day to always carry by your side an overwhelming joyful smile.
    She, rising from the enclosed cocoon, a passionate butterfly, spreading out wide it's two perfect wings, giving everything to brake through, to reach beyond and grasp, even for a slight second, the pure heart of a moment.
    She, the purity of a princess, casting a light, a light toward an ever ending path of sheer absolute beauty,
    She.....

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    awww that was simply wonderful! It was romantic and lovely. You are sheer genious when it comes to this. I wonderwho it is about *looks around* lol
    ^____^
    I loved how you discribed her.
    SHE must be proud.
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    Re: She.....

    Quote Originally Posted by crono_chris View Post
    She, the purity of a princess, that casts upon me an undeniable affection.
    She, a rare golden treasure I once began searching for and have finally found.
    She, the swift, vigerous warmth of the refreshing air breeze bedding itself throughout my undoubtful, unclouded cheeks, clearing them, chanting out "yet there is hope........ always".
    She the star shining angel emerging from the delicate sky above, granting a wish, the chance that there will be forever something more than special to hold onto.
    She, of whom brightens, as always a day like no other, a day to always carry by your side an overwhelming joyful smile.
    She, rising from the enclosed cocoon, a passionate butterfly, spreading out wide it's two perfect wings, giving everything to brake through, to reach beyond and grasp, even for a slight second, the pure heart of a moment.
    She, the purity of a princess, casting a light, a light toward an ever ending path of sheer absolute beauty,
    She.....

    That was awesome! It was so beautiful! It really touched me. ^_^

    One thing though: It's vigorous, not vigerous. Other than that you did very well! Good job, this poem rocked my socks! ~S


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    Very nice indeed! I loved it simply! It was just so romantic and sweet! Very great!!! I hope to see more in the future!
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    @.@ This is just great!!! A truly magnificent work I'd say... I really loved how you described this girl... Wonderful, heart touching- great. Made me dreamy, maybe a lill jelous... ^^ jk

    A really nice work here chris ^^ hope to see more...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Thank you all so very much.... I mean I have to be honest here, it wasn't simply the case of placing the pen to the paper, the way I expressed myself, the words I involved to carry along with the poem, a message, a message that was sealed tight, only to be released when everyone read it (if you understand what I'm trying to..... erm, say lol) so I wanted every person that verntured across these many words I've written of whom... and for what reason. At that very moment, I felt like really expressing my inner feelings toward something much more than, keeping them inside, it's always great to express yourself... i'm sure you all know and for the person it's being written to, they are the very words, of how I feel
    'She's known who she is '
    Oh, don't worry... you'll all see so much more, but then I'd love to read a few of yours people!

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    I love it, I think it flows beautifully and just the meaning is wonderful.

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    Sweet ruthem, ol' School format................. i like it. Keep it up.

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