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    She is incomplete.

    Little girl lost,
    That no family wants.
    Wandering in the woods alone.
    Happening upon,
    The big bad wolf,
    Who magically makes her feel at home.
    Dry your tears.
    Rest your head.
    I'll keep you very well fed.
    Saftey,
    Love,
    Security.
    But in the end, he's still a wolf.
    And he snatched up
    Her heart.
    And ate it whole.
    He got what he saught,
    And alone she finds herself again.
    But a little less complete.
    Tear stained cheeks,
    And blood shot eyes.
    Heart telling such terrible,
    Nasty little lies.
    Little feet begain to run.
    And when she stops,
    She finds she's only trapped herself further.
    Further in the quickly darkening woods.
    More lost then when she left home.
    More alone then ever before,
    She flings herself crying,
    On the leaf trodden ground.
    Scary noises, creatures, shadows,
    All around, every where, they reach,
    They grab they pull.
    Pull her down and wrap her up.
    The branches, roots and leaves,
    Swallow nimble body parts.
    Devouring her -almost- whole.
    It can't be truely whole,
    For she is imcomplete.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: She is incomplete.

    I like your poem. It's too bad I don't like the situation you speak of. I'm sorry that you're having such hard times, I wish I could help more. But, I'm at a loss of options. Try not to be so negative, I know things'll get better.


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    Re: She is incomplete.

    "try not to be so negitive" is easier said then done. Especially considering all I've been doing for the past oh...four months, is try to ****ing find the sunshine in my life. And I just... DONT see it.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: She is incomplete.

    wow.. @.@ another version of little red riding hood?

    "Little girl lost,
    That no family wants.
    Wandering in the woods alone.
    Happening upon,
    The big bad wolf,
    Who magically makes her feel at home."

    this is a cooler version it seems xD big bad wolf makes u feel welcomed....in his tummy?
    nicely done..love the imagery and the way you used the words ^^ keep up the good work

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