-=Broken^Halo=-

This started out alright.. perhaps I made it longer than what it should be and should delete the last few stanzas... either way.. random writing.


A Shore of Thoughts.

I walked along the shore,
picking out distant lights.
Counting dried shells,
that lay still in the night.

Such small creatures indeed,
that died a millennia ago,
I touch the pale shell,
that’s as white as snow.

I wonder of its true color,
before it moved it’s home,
Or if it died here amongst the shore,
all lifeless and alone.

If only I could change my skin,
become a new person.
If only I could move my home,
to where I’ve chosen.

But here I walk as I am.
Trapped forever more.
With a change that’s denied,
wandering shore to shore.

The sun, it rises slowly,
as if too lazy to appear.
Warming the dark sky,
unveiling waters crystal clear.

How the floods of the earth,
spill upon this shore.
Licking the sandy beach,
with waves of mystic lore.

Such mysteries oceans hold,
of myth and ancient tales.
I glance out into the water,
to behold astonishing sails.

A crew of angels by dawns light,
scurrying about with little care.
A ship afloat the mist of sea,
touching not water but air.

In blink of an eye the sight vanished,
carried to the heavens by pure light.
The mind in complete disbelief,
though my heart knows what's right.

Here upon the shore,
mysteries open wide,
I won't deny what I see,
but stay here by it's side.

For ever more,
Here upon this shore.



(larger font for easier reading ^.^)

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N!tr0-Glyc3r1n

very very great poem I really like it keep up the good work

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thank u SasuraiHell
go -=NOOBZ=- clan!

Baal

This one is longer
and better
keep em coming

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perdoname michelle!

-=Broken^Halo=-

Bah..

So free are the fish of sea,
setting out to the unknown.
Schools of wild creatures,
that have no stabled home.

This stanza is unecessary.. I'm going to edit it out.

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Baal

but this stanza is cool to why u just put it on another part.

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perdoname michelle!

-=Broken^Halo=-

It doesn't fit anywhere else in the poem.. it breaks the rythm of the two stanzas before and after it.. the whole idea of the sea being "mystical".. from stanza 7 to 8... it flows more nicely and makes more sense.... perhaps I'll reuse that particular stanza in a differant poem ^.^

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HieisLove

Dude!!!! I like it!! Keep it up!!!

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