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    Shores of Illusion

    I stood at the edge of illusion's shore.
    Despite being told to just ignore
    The "useless" urge to just explore.
    The raging seas, which hold much more...
    ...Than what anyone should go looking for.

    "Please stay here upon the land,
    Where lies are more than grains of sand.
    We supply what you demand.
    And you stay guided by our hand.
    For across the sea, theres other men...
    Don't fear us... be afraid of them!"

    And, though the liars don't agree
    I ventured out into the sea.
    I found more than evil there...I found a reality.
    My world has been created, visually.
    In a place where I'm supposed to be...
    Free?

    They've manufactured all I see.
    So, I'd believe society.
    "It must not be happening
    If I don't see it on TV."
    But, the deeper I go out to sea.
    The more I question... even me.

    An ugliness stirred in those waves.
    Wounded mothers, and murdered babes.
    The heads of men. Humanity's slaves.
    Naked children in their graves.
    The starving, lonely, and depraved.
    The dollar bills.
    Dollar bills.
    Because someone here is getting paid.

    I got in too deep, I swam so strong
    In the truth that proved the liars wrong.
    Before I was a daughter, or a mom.
    I was concieved, a brainwashed pawn.
    Living the lies that had been spawned....
    On the shore I stood, for far too long.

    The ugliness in which I swam...
    Showed me, indeed I was condemned.
    Across the sea, were other men....
    But this ugliness... it did not stem
    From them.

    Afterall they must defend
    With greater force than what we send.
    They borrow the trouble in which we lend.
    This ugliness, we've made a trend.

    On the shores of illusion.
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    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Shores of Illusion

    Holy branching OUT batman!!

    Wow Peach. This in my opinion is one of the BEST you have ever done. Ever. Not only is it fantastically felt, every word. But it was damn near perfect (I find no flaws, but perfect is a strong word. ) The message was -beautiful- in it's realism and....disgustingness.
    Wow again!!!

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Shores of Illusion

    Thank you Chan...
    I sure do appreciate it too... Just because this poem came from a part of me that I don't get the oppertunity to express very often. I had seen some disturbing things (I went looking for them)... And the only way I could make myself less distraught, was to vent. Thusly creating this poem.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Shores of Illusion

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    Thank you Chan...
    I sure do appreciate it too... Just because this poem came from a part of me that I don't get the oppertunity to express very often. I had seen some disturbing things (I went looking for them)... And the only way I could make myself less distraught, was to vent. Thusly creating this poem.
    It was too good not to say something. It was so well felt, maybe because you don't get to express it very much. But it was ...beautiful. The wording and all and the sidelong image of the ocean it gave me. Very interesting picture it painted in my head.

    Good vent.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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