a short goodbye

*RayMe* · Mar 15, 2007, 05:31 PM

Twilight is gone
and i think it is time.
The perfect time.
A time to bid thee
a fair goodbye.
My time with you
was very beautiful.
I hope we will have it
again together.
i would hope to
have it much longer.
But time envies us
and we can't be together no more.
But, Fear not.
For i think that a goodbye
is only temporary.
So, farewell.
May we meet again...

*corrected a little

*koga23* · Mar 15, 2007, 05:39 PM

Nice poem Ray

i liked it and glad that u posted it.

deodaclan18 · Mar 15, 2007, 06:00 PM

pretty good poem. Fix a few errors and it will be even better. Great job.

*RayMe* · Mar 16, 2007, 03:25 AM

Hmm excuse me deodaclan18 could u help me and point out the errors u found
so i could fix it? ^^ ty

*P.R. Princess* · Mar 17, 2007, 05:18 PM

Really good poem Ray.
I really like it.
There were a few mistakes
But what poem dosn'e have any.
Any way I hope to see more of your work.
(^.^)

*RayMe* · Mar 18, 2007, 02:34 AM

Ty ^^ but my work comes slow.. sigh..
i can't get ideas~!!! arggggggghhhh~!!

Mar 15, 2007, 05:31 PM	#1 (permalink)
RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,606 Thanks: 55 Thanked 27 Times in 24 Posts Credits: 59,502	a short goodbye Twilight is gone and i think it is time. The perfect time. A time to bid thee a fair goodbye. My time with you was very beautiful. I hope we will have it again together. i would hope to have it much longer. But time envies us and we can't be together no more. But, Fear not. For i think that a goodbye is only temporary. So, farewell. May we meet again... corrected a little __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!!* The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<< Last edited by RayMe; Mar 16, 2007 at 03:28 AM.
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Mar 15, 2007, 05:39 PM	#2 (permalink)
koga23 ~The Master~ Join Date: May 2005 Location: Massachusetts Posts: 2,161 Thanks: 3 Thanked 13 Times in 12 Posts Credits: 18,874	Re: a short goodbye Nice poem Ray i liked it and glad that u posted it. __________________ ....Player Killer.... † " There Is Nothing To Fear But F.E.A.R It Self "- (F.E.A.R) †
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Mar 16, 2007, 03:25 AM	#4 (permalink)
RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,606 Thanks: 55 Thanked 27 Times in 24 Posts Credits: 59,502	Re: a short goodbye Hmm excuse me deodaclan18 could u help me and point out the errors u found so i could fix it? ^^ ty __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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Mar 17, 2007, 05:18 PM	#5 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 910 Thanks: 3 Thanked 18 Times in 17 Posts Credits: 14,781	Re: a short goodbye Really good poem Ray. I really like it. There were a few mistakes But what poem dosn'e have any. Any way I hope to see more of your work. (^.^) __________________ ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~
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Mar 18, 2007, 02:34 AM	#6 (permalink)
RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,606 Thanks: 55 Thanked 27 Times in 24 Posts Credits: 59,502	Re: a short goodbye Ty ^^ but my work comes slow.. sigh.. i can't get ideas~!!! arggggggghhhh~!! __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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