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    Should you go first?

    Should you go first and I remain
    To walk the road alone,
    I'll live in memories garden dear,
    With happy days we've known.
    In spring I'll wait for rose's red,
    When faded, the lilacs blue.
    In early fall when brown leaves fall,
    I'll catch a glimpse of you.
    Should you go first and I remain,
    For battle to be fought.
    Each thing you've touched along the way
    Will be a hallowed spot.
    I'll hear your voice; I'll see your smile,
    Though blindly I may grope,
    The memory of your helping hand
    Will buoy me on with hope.
    Should you go first and I remain,
    One thing I'll have you do:
    Walk slowly down that long long path,
    For soon I'll follow you.
    I want to know each step you take,
    So I may take the same.
    For someday down that lonely road
    You'll hear me call your name.

    Foolish beating

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    Re: Should you go first?

    That is ... the best poem you have ever expressed ... truly amazing. Even though it's very emotional and in some parts sad, it's down right exultant. Genius, I say!

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    Re: Should you go first?

    It's lovely.. so beautiful and full of emotion... sad... -tears up- sheesh.. one of the few poems i think that has ever done this to me..

    I liked it a lot.. it was very brilliant and well written.. please, do write more. ^-^
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    Re: Should you go first?

    Well what do we have here?
    A well written poem about following someone down the road of life.
    I think this is a very good poem that you have written XXOXX.
    and I would like to read some more.

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    Re: Should you go first?

    wow.. @.@ xxoxx...thats...amazing...a ver very good poem indeed there... i loved it~!

    very nice way of using words..the rhymes were great... and the description and all...man...a dreamy poem but sad... nicely done.. im proud of you

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    wow!! it's awesome!! i loved how it was sad but it showed so much love. good job^^ i am truly one of your biggest fans now!! keep up the amazing work
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    Re: Should you go first?

    T.T i wish you are my biggest fan ryoma... T.T

    eeh..no worries..i have a true biggest fan already...wont hurt to get more though

    yea...i was impressed with this poem..i hope you will keep it up xxoxx~!! ^^ go girl~!

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    Re: Should you go first?

    I love this poem! your doing great keep up the good work! i dont se many of yours but your doing great! cant wait to see more!
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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