Silence Poem

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Well friends, it seems that we meet again.

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While the wildflowers bloom through the mountains
When the tide of the sea surges with necessity
Where are you my heart?
Where is this place that I do not know?

This place that does not exist
There is not a word said within this abyss
Time stops for me within
There I give the silence a kiss

Eventually help comes through the form
Even though I show no scorn
Earth is a distant place to me now
Endless is the bliss in which it wraps me

Such an end to a sad little tale
Sorry to have troubled the people of this world
So are the words that never fell
Sitting in the endless sea of silence.


I made this in my blog entry. I thought it was good, so I posted it here.

This poem is very well done. I don't know why, but i like the first 2 verses. PM me if you make another poem, i wanna hear it!

I think this is a very well written poem! The way it's written is what captivated me to read more and the title drew me in! Very well done! :thumb:

very nice poem, i enjoyed the choice of words very nice flow, keep it up! :)

Revision is necessary to evade typos. Other than that? Nice job, a bit more focus on what you're trying to say in the poem.

Ok, I redid some typos, and I found that the first two stanzas were amazing, but it fell apart at the last two stanzas because it went all non-conforming in the second line of the second stanza.

I redid it a little For an original of my poem, look at my zoints page thinggy where my blog is.

I prefer the last stanza. It adds the sense the of finality.