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    silent poet

    Hello and welcome to my little poetry cafe enjoy your stay.

    "Silent Wind"

    For things so silent in the breeze flowwing so lightly like a feather.
    In the darkness in the light enjoy stay for a horrible delight.
    Let your soul wander through heaven and hell and let those that see you be,
    protected in the light.For dawning above you'll see your destiny.


    sorry my poetry is abit rusty
    Your soul is now mine...

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    Re: silent poet

    the poem is kind of rusty..that's true.but the idea isn't too bad.neither is the title.if only the poem was a bit longer,then it would be good.oh yeah..check your spelling as well.

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    Re: silent poet

    It was a nice poem. Not bad for your first try. Good job.
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    Re: silent poet

    Nothing in this poem trasitioned nicely. Absolutely nothing gave me an idea as to what the poem wastalking about. Seems like you just through a bunch od random wording together and called it a quatrain.
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    Re: silent poet

    A new word for me today xD
    You need practice, no offence, try harder ^_^

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    Re: silent poet

    The title caught my attention me. Silence has always been one of those themes I am most fond of, especially in poetry, so that's the reason for it. But, your poem doesn't seem to have any direction, because the ideas in the lines seemed random. It doesn't seem to be expressing anything, and I don't see anything poetic about it because of that. The lines were not structured well (the third line was cut up and placed on the next line, while the previous lines were able to stand without being cut up).

    I think the main thing about your poem that threw it off for me was that it didn't look like it had a direction. It needs a more solid idea/concept to talk about.

    Also, I think it was unecessary that you described and gave your comment on your own poem. I'd rather the poem speak for itself.

    I like your intro, though. Keep trying.

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