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    A Single Tear

    To a child their world is their mother. Criticism wanted.


    Soft humming from a mother rocking her baby.
    Eyes canvassing a barren land.
    Searching the dried plain,
    Seeking reassurance.
    A heart aching for a place to belong.

    Her eyes look down to glance upon,
    The life in her arms.

    A drop of hope filled with sorrow,
    Lands upon an innocent cheek.
    Innocent eyes look up from their cradle of flesh,
    To behold the world.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: A Single Tear

    omg that is sooooooooooooooooooooooooo nie...sort of lol
    10/10*huggle*


    -".. Chase the morning, yield for nothing."

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    Re: A Single Tear

    almost made me cry...wait it did.
    very good.

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    Re: A Single Tear

    i prob give it 9.3 but its good

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    Re: A Single Tear

    Why would you take points away from the poem, hellknight? Criticism would be nice.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: A Single Tear

    Quote Originally Posted by Kasai
    Why would you take points away from the poem, hellknight? Criticism would be nice.
    it was a good poem keep making good ones like that


    -".. Chase the morning, yield for nothing."

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    Re: A Single Tear

    i agree with aiora good peom keep it up.

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    Re: A Single Tear

    Very good. Keep up the good work!

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