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Reply With QuoteStarted out okay, and then ended okay. however, you should try to make it a bit more complex in wording.
Why is it that sisters tease?
Can you tell me please?
They always make me cry
with one mean lie.
Why is it me,
They don't like to see?
All I did was love you!
Do you have no respect?
Or is it 'cause you have
to be perfect?
Started out okay, and then ended okay. however, you should try to make it a bit more complex in wording.
Seduced by Flesh
Oh well, it still suits the title you chose. As Kasai said, but I don't mind that much ^_^
It is ok.Not too great though.There are improvements needed.A bit longer and the words being more complex.That's the main thing.
Although it was short it was still a nice poem. Good job.
"Sunset Kisses Along The Beach"
Made for me by HolderofTheDarkChalice
Thanks so much I love it!
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