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    天空 (sky)

    I look up and all I see
    is a sky full of clouds
    and a horizion of trees.

    The green coloring starts
    to fade from the leaves,
    while the cool autumn air
    makes me shiver and freeze.

    Then I think about how
    my life is doin' so far.
    About how it's hard to get
    around if you don't have a car.

    I ponder what it would be
    like to live with my kid.
    I could protect him from harm,
    keep him from gettin' in s***.

    But it's hard now-a-days,
    because the drama and what-not,
    And the people in my life
    that I wish I completly forgot.

    So, I deal with my issues
    to the best of my ability.
    But I think that the s*** I
    go through is friggin' killin' me.

    And I'm just keepin' it real
    when I say I might snap
    due to a nervous breakdown
    from dealing with all this crap.

    I take a day or two off, in
    order to seek some help
    but I end up sitting in a
    damn waiting lobby by myself.

    Only to find out that I
    can't get anything done
    until I can afford to pay
    for fees, and that's no fun.

    So, I go back to staring.
    I look up towards the sky,
    while I look for answers
    and ask the clouds, "Why?"


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    Re: 天空 (sky)

    I really like this and I'm suprised no one commented on it yet. It's longer then most of your work. And maybe it's because we're so close, but I feel every word laden with sorrow and sadness. I can see the false smiles and happiness all throughout this. Trying to downplay your pain. I love this one in fact.

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    Re: 天空 (sky)

    You did great job on this
    and has alot of feeling in it
    hope to read more of your work
    keep up the great job okay

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    Re: 天空 (sky)

    wow... this is good... it's nicely done... i liked it... i enjoyed it ^^ keep up the good work my friend...

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    Re: 天空 (sky)

    Thanks to everyone for commenting on this piece. This one means a lot to me because this poem is pretty much about how I feel like all the time. The fact that you guys like it means tons to me. ^_^

    Thanks so much! ~S


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    Re: 天空 (sky)

    wow i loved this one i want your talent danget i have a lot of new ones but i havent had the chance to put em on here

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