slang tongue twist

darkness of an angel · Apr 01, 2007, 03:09 PM

Brand extension on the rez:
hiliger, adidas, nike, klein
hang loose on brown bodies,
from hats to pants even cool undies.

Walking billboards is the lastest trend
on our littered pow-wow grounds,
there's not enough long braids that dangle
or mother tongue words that tangle.

Skins dance,
but not to the pow-wow drum
it's a hip-hop beat from he ghetto streets.
Here they break dance, a funky horse prance,
flip high fives and slameach other's mothers
and lay the beats to their blood brothers.

Brand extension reaches
bush rez and rezurbia,
a disillusion of community
where skin is againist skin
in a neo-warrior gang clash.

CherryBlossom18 · Apr 02, 2007, 02:51 AM

Nice poem it had some good rhyming and told a good story.

Darkened_Star · Apr 02, 2007, 09:55 AM

I like your word usage and your ryhme as well. The first stanza is my favorite because of the word undies.

Anyway, I enjoyed it. It made me smile. Can't wait to read more.

*Kasai* · Apr 02, 2007, 11:16 AM

It's something new and interesting. I commend you for stepping out of the box. And you did it wonderfully.

Forgotten soul · Apr 02, 2007, 12:06 PM

cool poem I liked it very much ^_^
hope to see more

babepooh15 · Apr 04, 2007, 01:13 PM

Thats was sweet. I like it!!! It told a interesting story.

Apr 01, 2007, 03:09 PM	#1 (permalink)
darkness of an angel Newbie Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: I'm everywhere Posts: 58 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 652	slang tongue twist Brand extension on the rez: hiliger, adidas, nike, klein hang loose on brown bodies, from hats to pants even cool undies. Walking billboards is the lastest trend on our littered pow-wow grounds, there's not enough long braids that dangle or mother tongue words that tangle. Skins dance, but not to the pow-wow drum it's a hip-hop beat from he ghetto streets. Here they break dance, a funky horse prance, flip high fives and slameach other's mothers and lay the beats to their blood brothers. Brand extension reaches bush rez and rezurbia, a disillusion of community where skin is againist skin in a neo-warrior gang clash.
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CherryBlossom18 Heavy Metal Goddess Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: a place where the stars shine as bright as the sun Posts: 578 Thanks: 1 Thanked 16 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 2,326	Re: slang tongue twist Nice poem it had some good rhyming and told a good story. __________________ "Sunset Kisses Along The Beach" Made for me by HolderofTheDarkChalice Thanks so much I love it!
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Darkened_Star Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Earth Posts: 334 Thanks: 5 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 4,082	Re: slang tongue twist I like your word usage and your ryhme as well. The first stanza is my favorite because of the word undies. Anyway, I enjoyed it. It made me smile. Can't wait to read more. __________________
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Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,490	Re: slang tongue twist It's something new and interesting. I commend you for stepping out of the box. And you did it wonderfully. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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Forgotten soul Newbie Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 67 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 133	Re: slang tongue twist cool poem I liked it very much ^_^ hope to see more __________________ Last edited by Forgotten soul; Apr 02, 2007 at 04:42 PM.
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babepooh15 Newbie Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Michigan Posts: 53 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 200	Re: slang tongue twist Thats was sweet. I like it!!! It told a interesting story. __________________ poohs my boo
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