Nice poem it had some good rhyming and told a good story.
Brand extension on the rez:
hiliger, adidas, nike, klein
hang loose on brown bodies,
from hats to pants even cool undies.
Walking billboards is the lastest trend
on our littered pow-wow grounds,
there's not enough long braids that dangle
or mother tongue words that tangle.
Skins dance,
but not to the pow-wow drum
it's a hip-hop beat from he ghetto streets.
Here they break dance, a funky horse prance,
flip high fives and slameach other's mothers
and lay the beats to their blood brothers.
Brand extension reaches
bush rez and rezurbia,
a disillusion of community
where skin is againist skin
in a neo-warrior gang clash.
Nice poem it had some good rhyming and told a good story.
"Sunset Kisses Along The Beach"
Made for me by HolderofTheDarkChalice
Thanks so much I love it!
I like your word usage and your ryhme as well. The first stanza is my favorite because of the word undies.Anyway, I enjoyed it. It made me smile. Can't wait to read more.
Come dance in the rain with me, no one is watching.
It's something new and interesting. I commend you for stepping out of the box. And you did it wonderfully.
Seduced by Flesh
cool poem I liked it very much ^_^
hope to see more
Last edited by Forgotten soul; Apr 02, 2007 at 04:42 PM.
Thats was sweet. I like it!!! It told a interesting story.![]()
poohs my boo
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