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    slang tongue twist

    Brand extension on the rez:
    hiliger, adidas, nike, klein
    hang loose on brown bodies,
    from hats to pants even cool undies.

    Walking billboards is the lastest trend
    on our littered pow-wow grounds,
    there's not enough long braids that dangle
    or mother tongue words that tangle.

    Skins dance,
    but not to the pow-wow drum
    it's a hip-hop beat from he ghetto streets.
    Here they break dance, a funky horse prance,
    flip high fives and slameach other's mothers
    and lay the beats to their blood brothers.

    Brand extension reaches
    bush rez and rezurbia,
    a disillusion of community
    where skin is againist skin
    in a neo-warrior gang clash.

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    Re: slang tongue twist

    Nice poem it had some good rhyming and told a good story.
    "Sunset Kisses Along The Beach"
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    Thanks so much I love it!

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    Re: slang tongue twist

    I like your word usage and your ryhme as well. The first stanza is my favorite because of the word undies. Anyway, I enjoyed it. It made me smile. Can't wait to read more.

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    Re: slang tongue twist

    It's something new and interesting. I commend you for stepping out of the box. And you did it wonderfully.
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    Re: slang tongue twist

    cool poem I liked it very much ^_^
    hope to see more
    Last edited by Forgotten soul; Apr 02, 2007 at 04:42 PM.

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    Re: slang tongue twist

    Thats was sweet. I like it!!! It told a interesting story.
    poohs my boo

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