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    But if possible, can people please comment in "Tales of renewal in the future because that would be where I place all of my writtingsé I only made another thread because no one has replied in a while my thread and I can't double post, simply check below my signature and if something reaches you in the last few things I wrote or any other, feel free to leave a coment

    P.S.: Thanks for the positive reviews, but it is sometimes refreshing to be critisized to get better afterwards xD
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    w00t w00t!! OMG I LOVE YOU STUFF!!! *bows* Your the greatest!!!

    What can I say, I am not a poem kinda person! OMG!! So cool!!
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    Mr. K, your inbox is full...so here is the PM I reserved for you, whoever else reads this...don't take notice


    Can you please leave a comment in my other thread so I can continue writting neat stuff in the same place????

    Pretty please with a cherry on top!!!!

    I'm begging!!!

    I'm liking your shoes and groveling at...at...at....you!!!

    Well, I'm not "that" desperate, but let's say my thread seems to be viewed, but very few seem to comment at all in it....gah.

    So if you wanna have a chatter or anything, I should be free all this evening...maybe

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    Re: slave

    Nice Poem, like it very much
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    Well that's why we have people like me Red, and people like you who don't like criticizm annoy me too, so we're square. I was pointing out errors so they could be fixed, because it's a truly beautiful poem, and I merely sought to point out the blemishes, and if that's such a crime, then boohoo.
    It's a great work, like pointing out everything wrong with what we consider to be day to day life. Kinda' reminds me about slowing down to take a look at my life oncein awhile if you catch my meaning. Deep stuff though, it's like "welcome to civilization"
    again with the correction, geez! lol
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    Re: slave

    *Rolls eyes at Hitokiri. Keep at it man and STOP ADVERTISING YOUR THINGGY!! I'LL COMMENT IF IT MEANS THAT MUCH TO YOU!! LOL I've got your back mate.
    Writing is life again.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Soldat of life
    Slave

    Buying uselessly at every occasion,
    Watching what others want you to.
    Believing in heaven and Jesus and the saints,
    Having little room for your own faith in yourself.
    Trying to make it in a world where time cannot stop,
    Life is ruled over by specific yet ever changing rules.

    Lingering not on what is behind,
    Looking at what lays in present date.
    Waving away all that may interfere,
    Anything that is not efficient must go.
    Peace and love have no substance here,
    Only war may rage on endlessly.

    Resting once and awhile,
    Only when others say you can.
    Leading others from below you in stature,
    Your own pleasures taking all the room around you.
    Searching to be at the top,
    Falling back to square one as you begin the cycle anew...





    I'm tired and well, tired of money hungry companies that treat people like slaves...or nearly. Nighty!!! :P
    Gomen!!! >.< sorry for not being able to post in your last thread

    I'll do it right now! *flies to the thread*
    Your life is so stressful....let me comfort u XD
    People- stop spamming plz >.< dun close this thread!!!
    I prefered your other poems though, compared to this....too tired and stressed- can't relate
    Anyways, it had a really impressive ending
    Very deep....^_^
    Last edited by elie26; Jul 04, 2006 at 12:37 AM.

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    Re: slave

    oooo very good. I like the fority of tis.
    keep writeing poems like this, you will go far buddy *winks*

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    Re: slave

    wow...the cycle of life is written right there in this present day and age.....sweet...it flows smoothly as well.....keep it up

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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