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    Slave

    I thought I found the one and was able to live happily forever
    I thought I wouldn't find a problem never
    But I was wrong about everything
    I still feel that same pain holding our wedding ring
    I finally gaze at you for once but you treated me the same like what he did
    I felt the heavy chains on me again as you start blaming me like I'm a kid
    You throw me off again saying I betray you
    You hit me everywhere yelling saying you hoe who did you meet! who!
    I cry waiting for the pain to stop please stop
    I had to stand by your side to save you from the cops
    And yet you just push me in a cage as it felt like a cave
    There on I knew I was a slave
    So why do I still try to find love
    Why can't I find an angel from above

    Hope you guys enjoy it.
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: Slave

    Quote Originally Posted by KuwiRules145 View Post

    But I was wrong about everything
    I still feel that same pain holding our wedding ring
    I finally gaze at you for once but you treated me the same like what he did
    I felt the heavy chains on me again as you start blaming me like I'm a kid

    Hope you guys enjoy it.

    Very sad, and very tragic. These are my favorite lines. The story made me feel like I could easily be in her shoes... feeling trapped... a prisoner.

    Guess I should feel lucky that Im unwanted instead of captured.

    Thrilling poem, it was like a movie.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    I like this poem very much... veeeeeery much... it's just like if this poem is written about me... a story just as sad as my love always is... winter always comes... at least for me...
    A nice work you have here Kuwi!!!!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    I thank you both a lot!!!!! I really thank! I'm so glad hearing those words from very good poetics!!!! You both are really good at poems as well
    !!!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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