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Here I am once again
I fall once more
The temptation was to strong
I could not avoid it
and I fell there again
breaking the promise
I once did to you
Now it does not matter
how many times I say that I am sorry
I have said it so many times
That the word lost its meaning
I fell once more there
and I don't feel I can get up again
Tell me what you guys think please:angel:
I like it. Its like falling in the same place over and over. But you cant stop yourself from falling, like the ground draws you in.Quote:
Originally Posted by lebasiara
Thats what I got from it anyway.
A poem of hopeless desire. Very nice, leb-chan. Nice one you made, here. Keep it up;) Oh, and this line:
o.< fix please. lol.Quote:
breakinging the promise
Sorry about that!!! he he I didn't realized 'til u told me!!!! It's fixed now!!Quote:
Originally Posted by The White Wolf
I'm glad u like it:D:
Well I'm glad I helped you catch that mistake. Continue to write poetry, lebasiara. You have promising talent.:)
I like it... Keep up the good work! As I read this I thought of my want and desire to do something I've been told not to, and how hard I try not too. But I always end up doing it in the end. It may be a day, weeks, or months, but I always end up doing it again. Like I said, I like it! It made me relate to myself, and I love poems I can do that with. I can't wait to read more of your writings!
nice poem...i agree with whitey...i hope u continue 2 write more... ^^
Really nice poem. Enjoyable. Keep it up.
I'm not sure if this is a help but maybe you should consider putting in punctuation?
This is just a choice. Not an offense in anyway. ^ ^