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    Re: Slowly dying...

    About the temptation part, shouldn't that be "too strong"?????????? Nice poem. Keep up the good work.
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    Re: Slowly dying...

    The only thing i would criticise would be the punctuation as well.By doing so,would bring out the true flow and rhythm of the poem.Other than that,I like this poem.Very sweet.You have talent.

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