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Oct 17, 2007, 06:58 PM
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 Credits: 3,000 | The Smell The smell of them. The gaseous, gut wrenching stench. Nothing compares to that of the stink. The stink of souls. Souls that feed from your misery. To see it makes my spirit burn. They give eachother titles they never earned. Just to spit, right in my eye. Hungry, so they watch me die. Or is it that they want me to stink. Just like them... A vulture. But I will never sink. Sink so low as to share their stink. They do not know that Im still crying. Because I wanted to believe the lying. Convincing me to set pain aside. But I'll let them think I've already died. I've already rotted. At least thats what they should think. I've already given up my soul. To ones I know, could never stink. |
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Oct 17, 2007, 07:02 PM
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| Shining Star  Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Good question . . . where am I?
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Credits: 59,274 | Re: The Smell Quote:
Very nice imagery. The poem goes from a tone of loathing to identification . . . YOU DON'T STINK, PEACH!  I want more peachy poems!
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Oct 18, 2007, 08:23 AM
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Credits: 11,945 | Re: The Smell Extremely well written and well felt. Your writing has developed so much since you started posting here. Congradulations.
__________________ She's always trying not to cry. But I can see the demons in her eyes. She's always trying not to yell. But you see to her, she's trapped in hell. |
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Oct 18, 2007, 09:21 AM
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Credits: 59,148 | Re: The Smell agreed with divine and bratling... I like the imagery very well.. ^^ hey~! i called her peachy first~!! Keep up the good work! ^^ be watching ya like a shadow..  xD jk ^^ |
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