smile

i found my smile
i found my laugh
i found were i belong
in my mind, in the dark
were i laugh to my self at
every ones innocence
i found my smile
i found my laugh
i found were i belong

good poem but way to short and no stanzas

i know............................

i agree with nitro on this srry.

Your poem sure does have a good ring to it, but try to elaborate a little further, and work on the structure as well! We all will look forward to see some more..

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Originally Posted by tupacs_wifey

i know............................

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Next time, please don't do that! Make your post count!! We all know that you know that, but try to say what you might do to improve next time or something.

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Originally Posted by fayt lingod

i agree with nitro on this srry.

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~! Here again, don't just say that you agree with someone, and end your post like this. Offer a little more detailed suggestions.

If I find anymore of these kinds of short posts with no matter in it, infraction will be served, warning, that is.

thanx kedar i'll remember that

Interesing poem.. but I agree its to short.. and the word "were" is the plural past tense thing for "was" .... "I was" = "We were". You should be using the word "Where" ... :P Sorry.. I'm a grammar nazi.. It had good flow and was fairly emotional.. keep it up ^.^

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Originally Posted by -=Broken^Halo=-

Interesing poem.. but I agree its to short.. and the word "were" is the plural past tense thing for "was" .... "I was" = "We were". You should be using the word "Where" ... :P Sorry.. I'm a grammar nazi.. It had good flow and was fairly emotional.. keep it up ^.^

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thanx ugh i was horrible in english, and the teacher sucked to