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![]() ![]() Credits: 697 | smile i found my smile i found my laugh i found were i belong in my mind, in the dark were i laugh to my self at every ones innocence i found my smile i found my laugh i found were i belong
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__________________ HolderOfTheDarkChalice's LiL sis Last edited by kedar; Aug 18, 2006 at 09:05 AM. |
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![]() ![]() Credits: 17,255 | Re: smile Your poem sure does have a good ring to it, but try to elaborate a little further, and work on the structure as well! We all will look forward to see some more.. Notice: Quote:
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![]() ![]() Credits: 260 | Re: smile Interesing poem.. but I agree its to short.. and the word "were" is the plural past tense thing for "was" .... "I was" = "We were". You should be using the word "Where" ... :P Sorry.. I'm a grammar nazi.. It had good flow and was fairly emotional.. keep it up ^.^
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