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    Sniper's Lament

    Sore and weary i march alone
    and yet i know i must not slow
    here i sit in position prone
    a bullet waiting to make blood flow

    a sphere of flesh obstructs my view
    a childs head, in this im new

    i must do this, she carries death
    my only hope is that she's innocent
    the moments come, i hold my breath
    i pull the trigger the silence rent

    i pulled the trigger the silence rent
    to her my own life i would have lent

    many times after i faced this plight
    but i have fullfilled my mission
    my darkness fighting with the light
    it seems i made my decison

    in my country i will not fail
    no matter the consequences that entails
    Last edited by Bio-link; Nov 04, 2007 at 11:42 AM.


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    Re: Sniper's Lament

    Interesting..........it has a slightly heroic accent to it!!!!!!!!
    Very nicely done!!!!!!!
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    Re: Sniper's Lament

    oh yes...agreed with Astaroth...

    A powerful poem there.. very interesting.. love the way you used the words...and the rhymes are nice...

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    Re: Sniper's Lament

    Well this is pretty good, I must say.
    I like it due to the fact that though he is a
    killer. he would give his life for the person he has to kill.

    I think you should write some more, and soon.

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    Re: Sniper's Lament

    Interesting concept and topic. However correct capitalization would look nice.
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    Re: Sniper's Lament

    death defiying, sounds painfull! tainted! but good! Keep up the good work! and hope to see you around more!
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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