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    Snow

    it's bin awhile since i wrote any poetry for awhile

    The heavens open to give us white snow,
    The air itself seem to be cold but soothing,
    Watching the world around turn white,
    It's so pure at this very moment,
    Seeing your own breath form for a second.

    Our vision is covered, accompanied by something,
    Something sweet and loving which we know,
    Turn around see the her angelic face smile,
    Her eyes seem to brighten with the snow falling,
    We walk hand in hand,
    As we feel her body press against ours.

    Our world is at ease, at peace,
    It seems so pure in this single moment,
    This was to be our last winter together.

    sorry, i dnt think is my best >.< i'm struggling to get this poem flowing

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    Re: Snow

    -ROAR-
    it is good!
    AND YOU SAY 'OUR'
    DO YOU HAVE TWO PERSONALITYS????
    HA FUN
    i liked it
    the light off snow burns my eyes...
    and it is too cold...
    so i stay inside most the time...
    BUT REALLY GOOD POEM!!!! FOR REAL!!! I LIKED IT...it sounded sad!!!!!!!!-cries for you!-
    ok i am better!!!!!
    GOOD POEM
    MAKE IT RYME!!!!
    there are no raindrops on roses but there are still tears in my eyes...

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    Re: Snow

    i suspect love_love has split personalities... ^^lll should had participate in my Splits thread earlier...

    back to blade-san..


    Our vision is covered, accompanied by something,
    Something sweet and loving which we know,
    repeating the 'something' sort of spoiled the stanza. I would have love it. ^^
    but then again... overall it aint so bad. you just ned to get back to your inspirations. Loosen up all the rusty dust! XD baa~

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    Re: Snow

    i like this poem and the love theme is pretty cool and i liked how you
    put everything in to a third person view if you know what i mean
    i could relate like you was refering to me as well . if thatwasnt your intention sorry
    but that how i felt reading this
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Snow

    that was good. i like it.
    mm, HolderOfTheDarkChalice. not only you that flowing to his poem. i also...(am i?)
    but this is a good work.

    short but full of meaning.

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    Re: Snow

    DUDE!!! I like it!!!! Keep it up!!
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