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    Snow

    Looking out my kitchen window,
    I can see nothing but snow...
    It covers everything and erases
    everything that touches the earth
    like God's bottle of white-out.

    I think to myself, coffee in hand,
    why won't it snow in my mind?
    Let the flakes fall and turn my mind
    in to a blank slate--undo my memories
    and let my mind grow cold as winter.


    Let the snow bury my sorrow
    and hide it from the world.
    Cover this old wound from the
    past with winter's icy patch...

    Let it pile up higher and higher
    until there is nothing left to see.
    Hide all my old scars and smother my
    fears with your arctic blanket.

    Clear my mind with your natural
    correction fluid and turn this
    burning heart of anger in to an
    icy tundra full of nothingness...

    Cover everything and erase it,
    for I don't wish to live with these
    memories any longer...


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    Re: Snow

    I donno. Suprisingly for you it was weakly felt and forced. I liked the wording but it also didn't flow like your poetry usually does. Better luck next time.

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    Re: Snow

    I kinda agree with bratling.. o.O hmm what happened to you my friend?

    But i love the dreamy effect the poem made... it was very nice... keep it up man ^^

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    Re: Snow

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    I kinda agree with bratling.. o.O hmm what happened to you my friend?

    But i love the dreamy effect the poem made... it was very nice... keep it up man ^^
    Y'know, I was asking myself the same question. Personally, I think my writing skills are fallin' off. I guess I've just been in a slump for too long. I haven't been proud of my work since last month's POTM entry. I dunno why I even post it, LOL.

    At any rate, I'm glad you took time to read it.


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