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    Snowy White Light

    I used to always dream about this strange snowy white veil, but lately it's become faded to a snowy white light.
    The scenes of olden days, of darker ages would flit by the veil like a movie screen, now all they are is a blood red sheen and a violent scream.
    When ever I have these dreams I always see one face, face that terrifies me more than anything else I've seen through this veil, the face of the man I love the most... drained of all color his sky blue eyes hallow and clouded.
    I always wake from the snowy white light with a scream and look around panicked, just to find him next to me.
    When ever I wake I see that snowy white light pass by a window where no light ever shines through.
    Boarded over years ago and with a stain of blood.
    A house as old as world war one and generally just as cold. I want to wake him and have him hold me but that snowy white light continually haunts me.
    I've seen it now for over a year, and progressively slow grows my fear.
    Every flash of headlight on the dark country road, every strike of lightning curls my body,head to toe.
    I feel my hair stand on end until the light fades from sight, and then I'm just surrounded by the silent country summer night.

    {Uhh.. o.o; -=rereads poem=- man... I need to stop dreaming... -=shudder=-}
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    Re: Snowy White Light

    Oh wow this is so sad I cried!*teary-eyed* but nice use of words and description I loved it keep it up! I do hope to see more! Meow!^^



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    Re: Snowy White Light

    I got another one lined up ... Hopefully it will turn out well
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    Re: Snowy White Light

    Wow, I really like all your works so far. You put so much feeling behing your words.
    I only have one tiny sudgestion... I think the flow of your pieces would be a little smoother if you had some breaks in the structure.Think about it?
    ... Not Ever Again...

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