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    So-called friends

    Feelings of familiarity
    Clung to so desperately.
    Causing only loneliness,
    when it comes to his
    Piercing state of mind.
    Desperation, how unkind
    A feeling, so hard to unwind.
    Maybe next time around
    We'll find a way to not come down.
    Down from that cloud up so high.
    That tricked us, said we could fly.
    So off that cloud did I leap
    Not knowing I would have to keep
    All those feelings trapped inside
    And instead just stand beside.
    Resentment is hard to hard to beat
    Even after the love you meet
    To save you from your deathly fall.
    So now who knows what to do with it all?

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: So-called friends

    Maybe next time around
    We'll find a way to not come down.
    Down from that cloud up so high.
    That tricked us, said we could fly.
    Wow... These are my favorite lines.

    Its different ot see you have stuck to a rhyme so consistently. I like it. Just don't feel the title did it justice. Or maybe that because I know you, and am trying to decipher.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: So-called friends

    I have been feeling quite wordy lately. They are after all my favorite thing so I thought it appropriate to attempt at least to stick to a rhyme scheme once I'd found the one that worked for what I wanted to say.
    I totally didn't dig the title either, but I had a lot of trouble picking one so I didn't know what to call it.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: So-called friends

    this is really gd ^^ gd work .
    ‘Cause I’m broken when I’m open
    And I don’t feel like I am strong enough
    ‘Cause I’m broken when I’m lonesome
    And I don’t feel light when you’re gone away

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    Re: So-called friends

    In the words of my good friend Borat, "VERY NICE!"

    I like your wording in this one! Keep it up!


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