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    ....so close but yet so far....

    Time just fades away,
    as it increases the pain,
    i stand under the cold rain,
    i feel like i'm forgotten...

    I need to get far from here,
    i should confront my fears,
    but though i want so,
    i'm blinded by tears,
    all that i can feel,
    is that i'm hollow inside,
    i can't stay in here another night.

    It's not only me,
    it's my words,
    we are always forgotten,
    it's like all of a sudden,
    i cannot speak,
    i lost my voice...
    what it's wrong with me,
    words keep slipping away...
    like i've got nothing to say...

    I keep fading away,
    into the nothingness inside of me,
    i'm lost inside my frozen core,
    i don't feel like myself anymore,
    someone took myself out of me,
    i cannot breathe,
    i started to bleed,
    i feel cold,
    but somehow... even though i bleed,
    i don't die,
    this feeling inside,
    i can't describe....

    How can i be alive, when i feel like i died...?
    Carpe Diem. Quam minimum credula postero! (:

    Wishing, waiting, dreaming..

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    Re: ....so close but yet so far....

    Deep! Great poem and imagery! Keep up the good work!


    "Look for the mischievous paw prints in the sand, and as they disappear into this earth torn land. Will they be true or stay forever blue? That's were this BlueFox will stand."

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    Re: ....so close but yet so far....

    damn it shia! you are good! taking everything from the inside... i know it's hard for you...
    <3
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    I'll be your hope, i'll be your wish, i'll be everything that you need...
    I'm gonna take your soul out of your body-Hikaru&Shia
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    Shia i lovez ya! and ya poems!
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    Re: ....so close but yet so far....

    i know u r gonna get sad if u see none or not much replies, and u won't wanna write again, sooo.... woooo shiaaaa!!! awesome poem! keep on rockin & keep on writing! ^_^
    I'll be your hope, i'll be your wish, i'll be everything that you need...
    I'm gonna take your soul out of your body-Hikaru&Shia
    Wanna know something stupid? i'm watching yaz xD
    Shia i lovez ya! and ya poems!
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    Re: ....so close but yet so far....

    hikaru... i apreciate... but though u r my best friend, don't do that... it's lame.. if this poem suck... it just does and no one will reply... but the world won't stop for reading what i write...
    but thanx so much, i know u just wanna cheer me up, righz? XD
    miss ya! suu
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    Carpe Diem. Quam minimum credula postero! (:

    Wishing, waiting, dreaming..

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    Re: ....so close but yet so far....

    Sweet ... err ... deep poem! ^_^ You tell me exactly how I sometimes feel ...

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    Re: ....so close but yet so far....

    great , awesome , and wonderfull
    that was a depp poem there
    this one is really good
    please do write more, you have talent ,
    keep up the good work
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    Re: ....so close but yet so far....

    well, thank you so much (:
    Carpe Diem. Quam minimum credula postero! (:

    Wishing, waiting, dreaming..

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