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    So numb (reading between the lines)

    I always hang on your every word.

    When you’re sick of me. I’m sick of me too.

    When you say you’ll be here, I stay up waiting.

    But you never come.



    Not first priority, or even second, or third.

    I’m an obstacle you avoid going through.

    So, that’s why its me, we BOTH end up hating.

    And I feel so numb.


    I always hang on your every word.
    Not first priority, or second, or third.

    When you’re sick of me. I’m sick of me too.
    I’m an obstacle you avoid going through.

    When you say you’ll be here, I stay up waiting.
    So that’s why its me we BOTH end up hating.

    Because you never come.
    I feel so numb.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: So numb (reading between the lines)

    This is really interesting... Deamn do I sometimes feel just like this!!!
    I enjoyed reading this, I fancy the way you've written it, it's something very new and intriquing...
    A good work indeed!!!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: So numb (reading between the lines)

    Lol, that's cool! No wondered I thought that some of the words rhymed, although it wasn't immediately O.O It's a sad poem, full of crushed hopes, but yet you seem to cling on to it. The last line made it to a halt. Like everything's been paused in a movie =p Nice effect there.

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    Re: So numb (reading between the lines)

    Wow what a cool poem!!!!! How do you make poems so quickly! Well this one deals with hate thats why I really like it!!! The anger rules! I hope to see more in the future as well.
    Last edited by KuwiRules145; May 18, 2007 at 05:43 PM.
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