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    Solamente un favor.

    Dance for me, love.


    C'mon, you know you want to.

    Give me that soft cha-cha step you know oh so well.
    Or maybe even that smooth mambo you
    so gracefully love to fraternize with.

    Please, I'm begging you darling.
    Make me smile from ear to ear as the essence
    of your movement gradually kisses my face.
    Commit that angelic crime and give me
    that aweful chill down my backbone.
    Allow my heart to jump at every turn and twist you conceive.
    Have me bite my lip and try to restrain the utter
    pleasure in which you so easily fabricate.

    The atmosphere is right, my soul. My love.
    I don't think it possible for you not
    to give me at least a demonstration.
    This insatiable hunger I feel for you makes me crazier
    with every growing moment.
    I might lose control 'less you do just this one favor for me.

    Solamente un favor.
    Only one favor.

    Dance for me.
    And I will be at peace.

    Hand me that breathtaking image of tranquility on a Silver Platter.
    Bring me the happiness and laughter of A Million
    memories with just a single revolution.
    Envelope society's frivolous mistakes and instabilities,
    if only for a moment, and bring about your security blanket of homogeneousness.

    Baby, I'm talking magic.
    Work it like there's no tomorrow.
    Give me that wakeup call I've been waiting for, and let
    me know that it will be all right.

    I just need you to snow.
    Let your flakes rejoice in this icy breeze.
    Prance around the Earth's surface, lighting up each
    substance you gingerly caress.
    Enhance my body with that adrenaline rush that
    materializes itself from the scent of your habitation.

    Hazme un favor,
    only one favor.

    And Dance for me, love.
    Sprinkle my fantasies down on this parade.

    Last edited by The White Wolf; Nov 21, 2007 at 09:48 AM.

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    Re: Solamente un favor.

    someone is.. obsessed with someone...

    Hmm the style goes nicely with the title.. but i don't like the flow... kinda make me read fast... and i can't stop.. made the dreamy effect that this poem suppose to have.. lesser... :/

    but.. it was nicely written and the strong usage with the words and all.. made this poem very "powerful"... the imagery is there and the description was very good... and detailed

    A very good poem... keep it up... ^^

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    Re: Solamente un favor.

    Dude, you got me with the title i thought it was a poem in Spanish. Anyway, it was a very well written and worded. I liked the ending the most though. Keep up the good work man.

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    Re: Solamente un favor.

    WoW!!! Really good ^^ At first I found the theme kinda odd, but then the poem just took over me and that is a great, great thing

    I love how you put in the Spanish (or whatever Sorry) parts...
    And I must agree with Ray, I just felt like reading it really fast, even jumping over some words, it kinda made even my heart beat faster. I don't even understand why and how you did it. Where you listening to a song when you wrote this? A fast one? The flow is perfect in this peice of work.

    This is much different than anything I've read (I must say again ), because it's more like... rap? I don't know- cooler , and I really like this ^^ And I hope to see more (yea, I know I always say that, but I always mean that)!!! ^^

    P.s. A question you can ignore- is this to a special someone? Cuz I'd almost rather say it's to a pop (this time dance) star

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    Re: Solamente un favor.

    This is a good poem...unfortunately, it doesn't follow the theme for this month's POTM:

    Themes for POTM

    I would definitely like to see you enter one that does.

    Moving to general poetry section.
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    Re: Solamente un favor.

    Quote Originally Posted by gren View Post
    This is a good poem...unfortunately, it doesn't follow the theme for this month's POTM:

    Themes for POTM

    I would definitely like to see you enter one that does.

    Moving to general poetry section.
    Whoops!
    Well then.. until next time.



    No, this poem was NOT to a special someome. It did however snow the day I wrote it, and so it inspired me to write. The poem was about snow, and nothing more.

    I'm very glad indeed.
    Glad that this poem gave your thought process twists and turns, just like the snowflakes I described .

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    Re: Solamente un favor.

    Oh wow... that is so cool. I haven't had inspiration like that for ages!!!! That's just great ^^ Gives a whole lot of different sence to the poem... nicey ^^ I'm glad to see some people who appriciate snow...

    Again... nice work (hmmm... the fact you wrote it about snowflakes makes it even better)

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    Re: Solamente un favor.

    O.O
    I LOVE IT!!!
    LOVE IT!!
    I do agree with RayMe thogh about the flow
    but other than that it is like awsome!!
    I love the way its written and just the whole poem.lol..

    Kepp it up!! ^_^

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