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    Solitude...

    I wrote this some time ago... i just wanted to know what people think... if it's good or not...

    It's been so long,
    how much will it take for me too see,
    that no one ever cared,
    and no one will.

    It's like i'm invisible,
    i don't even exist,
    they are all so blind,
    they all see through me.

    I'm all alone,
    in this ****ed up place,
    where lies pass for grace.
    Everyone's so fake,

    everything's so screwed,
    every breath i take is in vain,
    after "trust" it always comes pain.

    I don't pretend to be important,
    i don't pretend to be significant,
    i just wish someone missed me,
    nothing worths a breath to me anymore,
    everyone left me behind,
    but i swear i will never cry.
    I have to learn to say good bye.
    I'm weak so i have to die...

    I feel worthless,
    i just wish to disappear,
    maybe after all,
    though i am invisible and all alone,
    i don't care anymore.
    No one will ever see,
    what's inside of me.

    They only think about themselves.
    they are inlove with their own reflextions,
    So i won't return again,
    no one will notice my absence.
    But i know, even so,
    I have to let go this pain,
    i cannot bare this anymore,
    i have to let go....
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    Wishing, waiting, dreaming..

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    Re: Solitude...

    i like it! its really good. i wish i had the talent to write poems! i'm not as good with word. any ways good job!!! hope to talk to you again!
    "... And then, a ray of light pierced the darkness. The light turned into a figure of a person who was followed by a fairy, and also held the spirit of the forest..."



    thats great!! thank you!!


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    Re: Solitude...

    Wow its really great ....I just hope u dont feel like that anymore!!

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    Re: Solitude...

    Quote Originally Posted by Princess Zelda14 View Post
    i like it! its really good. i wish i had the talent to write poems! i'm not as good with word. any ways good job!!! hope to talk to you again!
    thanx ^_^ i thought people would tell me i suck... heehee
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    no way! you are really good! far far away from sucking!!
    "... And then, a ray of light pierced the darkness. The light turned into a figure of a person who was followed by a fairy, and also held the spirit of the forest..."



    thats great!! thank you!!


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    Re: Solitude...

    well...once again...thanx so much (:
    Carpe Diem. Quam minimum credula postero! (:

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    Re: Solitude...

    no prob. i like it A LOT! i hope everythings ok now. if you ever wanna talk to me you can pm me. if ya want to.
    "... And then, a ray of light pierced the darkness. The light turned into a figure of a person who was followed by a fairy, and also held the spirit of the forest..."



    thats great!! thank you!!


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    Re: Solitude...

    this poem is very good shia, hahahaha, i know u may think i'm saying this cuz i'm ur friend, but... it's really good! i get down with it XD hahaha.
    My favorite part was:
    I feel worthless,
    i just wish to disappear,
    maybe after all,
    though i am invisible and all alone,
    i don't care anymore.
    No one will ever see,
    what's inside of me.

    You just put urself out there!!! =)
    I'll be your hope, i'll be your wish, i'll be everything that you need...
    I'm gonna take your soul out of your body-Hikaru&Shia
    Wanna know something stupid? i'm watching yaz xD
    Shia i lovez ya! and ya poems!
    Colorful stylez

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