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    Some of my poetry

    Please Don't Think

    summers ended
    winter sets in
    dead leaves
    fall from the trees
    the grace of love
    the snap of pain
    kill me more
    each passing day
    I am alone
    I choose to be
    i broke the chain
    now i am free
    no evil will even
    re-chain me
    smile softly
    gentle pain
    kiss my neck
    and feel for me
    independence
    self sacrifice
    I find a way home
    your guiding light
    In your arms
    your chest feels great
    but please don't think
    just smile and wink
    I like my life
    my smile my tear
    maybe with some
    nibbles on the ear
    I might cuddle you
    these cold winter nights
    the fire blazing
    within my heart
    can i love
    without falling apart
    do I dare try
    I know this road
    if he make me mad
    i can make him a toad


    another one i wrote a couple minutes ago...


    awake in the night for a horrible dream
    where it all felt real so it would seem
    the grass grew up around my spine
    and the trees grew around me in a circular line
    I fell to the ground and started to scream
    in a panic i woke thinking 'shit what a dream'
    my sheets were tided around my feet
    I caught my breath and calmed my heart beat
    the power of the dream that woke me that night
    as I adjusted my eyes into the moonless light
    then I felt a hand pull me back into bed
    where i fell back asleep with out a word said
    in the morning i remember as I raise out of bed
    my bed was empty and the morning air dead
    who's hand was that who cuddled me tight
    but it was a dream I was alone all night


    anyone can comment... xD
    My love for you was strong, it hurts to carry on, without you by my side, i now have to go hide!

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    Re: Some of my poetry

    Quote Originally Posted by wiccachick5 View Post
    Please Don't Think

    summers ended
    winter sets in
    dead leaves
    fall from the trees
    the grace of love
    the snap of pain
    kill me more
    each passing day
    I am alone
    I choose to be
    i broke the chain
    now i am free
    no evil will even
    re-chain me
    smile softly
    gentle pain
    kiss my neck
    and feel for me
    independence
    self sacrifice
    I find a way home
    your guiding light
    In your arms
    your chest feels great
    but please don't think
    just smile and wink
    I like my life
    my smile my tear
    maybe with some
    nibbles on the ear
    I might cuddle you
    these cold winter nights
    the fire blazing
    within my heart
    can i love
    without falling apart
    do I dare try
    I know this road
    if he make me mad
    i can make him a toad


    another one i wrote a couple minutes ago...


    awake in the night for a horrible dream
    where it all felt real so it would seem
    the grass grew up around my spine
    and the trees grew around me in a circular line
    I fell to the ground and started to scream
    in a panic i woke thinking 'shit what a dream'
    my sheets were tided around my feet
    I caught my breath and calmed my heart beat
    the power of the dream that woke me that night
    as I adjusted my eyes into the moonless light
    then I felt a hand pull me back into bed
    where i fell back asleep with out a word said
    in the morning i remember as I raise out of bed
    my bed was empty and the morning air dead
    who's hand was that who cuddled me tight
    but it was a dream I was alone all night


    anyone can comment... xD
    oh my... i take it that allllllllllllll this is about me?

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    Re: Some of my poetry

    lol, not even, i had a bad dream the night before and remembered about it, cause it felt as if someone was with me! I actually have more poems, if any one wants to see them
    My love for you was strong, it hurts to carry on, without you by my side, i now have to go hide!

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    Re: Some of my poetry

    You could work on the structure of 'Please Don't Think'. Specifically, the "no evil will even re-chain me" struck me as awkward. I don't think you'd need to put a hyphen between "rechain", either. And for your more recent poem, I don't think your use of the word "tided" is correct.

    Hope that helped.
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    Re: Some of my poetry

    lol, no none of it is about you, and i will be posting up some new poetry soon, so hold tight!
    My love for you was strong, it hurts to carry on, without you by my side, i now have to go hide!

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