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    For Some, Tomorrow Never Comes

    My name is Death and all will know my face
    I entice you with sleep and a shadowy lace
    Most everyone fears me but wrongfully so
    I am only a passage to the new life you go
    Yet I can breathe in the fear you create so easily
    The fear that seems to surround my darkened entity
    Oh how you tremble when at night you do roam
    So you cling desperately to that which you know
    Until before long you are bound in my throes
    Some think me the judge of their life soon to be
    They are likely confused between God and between me
    Though I offer no heaven or eternal damnation
    I merely take lives without hesitation
    Spend not your life in fear of Death's land
    But rather be wary of God's judging hand
    So don't think of me as an unloving friend
    I am your last piece of happiness before life's end
    And one day I'll come for you at your final goodbye
    Just know that life awaits you wherever we fly.

    In the future reflected in the fruit
    I change my dream into an ideal

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    Re: For Some, Tomorrow Never Comes

    Please check the current theme before submitting an entry to POTM.

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    Moving to general poetry section.
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    Re: For Some, Tomorrow Never Comes

    Hmm... seemingly gren is still working hard.. *scratches head* sheesh.. ^^ oh well..

    The poem hmm... i prefer if you put it in stanzas... :/ kinda hard to read... made the flow fast... too fast for this poem... hmm... you are talking about death...so a slow flow is a good one...

    Hmm the rhymes were good... and this is a very interesting poem... nicely done i must say... but make it easier for the readers to read and the poem will come out better to them... it's like when you are watching the movie and the movie was low in quality... @.@ i will say the movie is a trash... so.. remember... put the readers first..

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