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    Someone Really Love You?

    Does someone really love you?
    Or do they just like to keep you near....
    Does Someone really love you?
    Or do they love how you persevere....

    You'd do anything for someone.
    Would that someone do the same?
    The greatest gift someone could give,
    Is to take away your pain....

    Do you really know that someone?
    What they say when you're not there?
    They say they can not love you...
    ... all they can really do is care.

    Can someone really love you,
    If they're telling you to wait
    Until they've given up the search
    to find a BETTER mate?

    Does someone really love you,
    If they can only give excuses?
    Excuses only soften blows,
    They can not heal the bruises...

    Tell me, does someone love you,
    If they think of you and weep?
    They can only hold you, in their dreams...
    So they can't wait to sleep.

    Someone who really loves you...
    They're cleaning up your mess.
    They'll scream and kick if they cant have you.
    Because they'll take nothing less.

    Be careful who you give love to.
    Be careful how you spend your time.
    You could be loving the wrong someone...
    ... While real love gets left behind.


    *** This is about us. We know who we are. So many people should be able to take this to heart. Its about you, her, him, me.... and all of them.
    Last edited by Peach_follows; Dec 10, 2007 at 02:46 PM. Reason: Added another stanza...
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Someone Really Love You?

    Oof! Such true and yet sad words.

    I like your rhyming scheme in this one. Your vocabulary has expanded, I see.
    Good work on this one, although I winced at certain parts--only 'cuz truth hurts a bit. I hate to see what everyone else usually thinks in writing.

    But none-the-less, good job.


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    Re: Someone Really Love You?

    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    Your vocabulary has expanded, I see.
    My vocab has expanded? I don't know how take that...

    I guess I overheard a coversation between some SMART people on my walk home... y'know... after I got off the short bus. I guess I must've absorbed some their big words. like PERSEVERE....

    Naw, but for real... thank you.
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    Re: Someone Really Love You?

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    My vocab has expanded? I don't know how take that...

    I guess I overheard a coversation between some SMART people on my walk home... y'know... after I got off the short bus. I guess I must've absorbed some their big words. like PERSEVERE....

    Naw, but for real... thank you.
    Naw, it's not like you're hooked on phonics or somethin'. I rarely read your work, so when I do, I'm amazed at how you can find different ways to rhyme your words together. The way you put them together is interesting, because you don't use the same format for every rhyming poem you write.

    I'll rephrase my last statement, for it's not your vocab, it's your word play that's expanded. Kudos!


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