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Reply With QuotePunctuation and captalization is a place to start with the poem.
sometimes i feel shattered
brocken inside
but i try and stop it
hide it abide
though i feel hurt
and my feelings are mixed
theres one thing
that i do just for kicks
i sit in the darkness
and cry all alone
those are my only true feelings
that are actully shown
i know it sux
Punctuation and captalization is a place to start with the poem.
Seduced by Flesh
revise your poem before posting..
brocken - broken
actully - actually
aside from the mispelled words and kasai's advices..
your poem is great!
Cry. hiding those emotions inside is bad for you.
If you don't like me, it's mind over matter.
I don't mind and you don't matter
its good enough lol im sorry i love ya u know so dont feel bad im sorry
its ok you had nothing to do with it dont worry and stop reading over my shoulder
Hey who cares your poem still rocks fixing it or not! At least you can say it right.
「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」
thank you very much i wrote it along time ago though
Well, the mistakes have been pointed out, and it would've been better if ti was a bit longer ^_^
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