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    sometimes dont you

    sometimes dont you feel
    like you just want to die
    like maybe just sit there
    and contiune to cry
    i know how you feel
    cause i feel it to
    i want them to feel
    our pain thats so strewn
    so each time we cut
    they grope their wrists in pain
    and hopefully feel a suddin wave of shame
    and remember they hurt us
    and we hurt them now
    suddenly sit back and think
    about this and how
    was i really that mean?
    was i really that cruel?
    but thats all behind us
    causee now they feel our pain too
    they bleed when we bleed
    and they hurt when we do
    hopefully they learned this lesson as well
    by hurting others
    you hurt yourself too

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    Re: somtimes dont you

    I like your poem. I really hope everyone enjoys reading it! I hope to see more in the future.
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    Re: sometimes dont you

    i really like your poem.i would try to post one but i dont want to because yours is so good and the last time i did that well lets just say there is proabaly some guy i norway laughing at me.

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    Re: sometimes dont you

    Quote Originally Posted by Little negi sensei View Post
    i really like your poem.i would try to post one but i dont want to because yours is so good and the last time i did that well lets just say there is proabaly some guy i norway laughing at me.
    You should never hesitate in life because of fear of ridicule. A lot of people here are nice and nobody is going to openly insult you here. Plus, criticism helps you to improve.

    Anyways, the poem was nice dark lover, but maybe splitting it up in stanzas would make it flow better. I say maybe becaue I am in no way a poem expert. Keep up the good work.
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    Re: sometimes dont you

    Add correct captialization wouldnt hurt the poem as well.
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    Re: sometimes dont you

    thanks all though i dint think this one of my best
    i all ways love hear your thought

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    Re: sometimes dont you

    i liked it, it's sad but you give a reason on why you do it and explain yourself well.

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    Re: sometimes dont you

    So true... but what...why would you write this, no one should be alone, we feel alone?...yes...Are we alone?...not always, I'm always alone but together we're not...

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