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    Sore Heart

    Ano... a bunch of poems seem very depressing on here.
    Is it a theme of some kind?
    Well,
    none the less...
    Here's something I was inspired to write by "annomous person".

    Sore Heart
    I am nothing but a burden.
    Seeking the love of another,
    But still caring for my own.
    Why do you do this to me?
    Are my tears not satisfying for the damage I have done?
    What more do I have to give…
    If I have nothing more to give?
    But the beating heart from my chest,
    Which would be torn into halves for the affection of my two beloveds.
    To end my life,
    So simple,
    So affective,
    But the hopes and dreams of the ones I care for are far too much to risk.
    The terror of love is passion.
    To hold the one you love close to you,
    To hear the beat of their heart,
    To feel the warmth of their body against yours,
    To do anything,
    Just for them to take notice of your devotion for them
    The choice to love,
    Is only mine,
    And mine alone.
    To which I shall cherish for eternity?
    That, I am not sure of.
    It will revile its self in time.
    But for now,
    It is wise to wait.

    I still wonder why I wrote that... o.0

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    Re: Sore Heart

    The choice to love,
    Is only mine,
    And mine alone.
    Great poem... Yes there seems to be a thing with dark, depressing poems. But those are my favorite kind. I quoted my favorite lines from your poem. I just recently told a person I loved him. My family doesn't really like the idea of me loving him, but it's my choice. I relate to these lines the most. Great poem!

    Come dance in the rain with me, no one is watching.

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    Re: Sore Heart

    Quote Originally Posted by Darkened_Star View Post
    Great poem... Yes there seems to be a thing with dark, depressing poems. But those are my favorite kind. I quoted my favorite lines from your poem. I just recently told a person I loved him. My family doesn't really like the idea of me loving him, but it's my choice. I relate to these lines the most. Great poem!
    Wha~ I just discouvered the color button!
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    I am a love sick fool,
    I know the dating game through and through,
    My friends love me cause I always get the dates with the people they like.
    (Any sexuality that is)

    *GASPS!*
    That is perposterous!
    Your family should have very little say on that...
    but do take what they say on a note.
    Sometimes a guy can be a real... meanie!

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    Re: Sore Heart

    Glad you're getting the hang of things.

    It's not that he's mean... He's gotten into a lot of trouble recently, and it's along the same lines of what got my mother, father, uncle, and brother in trouble (drugs). He's awesome toward me. ^_^

    Come dance in the rain with me, no one is watching.

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    Re: Sore Heart

    Quote Originally Posted by Darkened_Star View Post
    Glad you're getting the hang of things.

    It's not that he's mean... He's gotten into a lot of trouble recently, and it's along the same lines of what got my mother, father, uncle, and brother in trouble (drugs). He's awesome toward me. ^_^
    Drugs...?
    >.<
    Well sweetie, as long as he's nice to you.
    But once he steps outta line, just becareful.
    A lot of people get hurt like that,
    BELIEVE ME!
    I know XP

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    Re: Sore Heart

    Very good poem. It tells a story about someone who wants nothing more than to be loved. Great job and I look forward to reading more.
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    Re: Sore Heart

    My God, I feel I understand this poem. I feel I identify with it a great deal.

    And about the theme of depressing poems... I think pain is a great source of inspiration for creativity. Theres a rainbow of emotions behind a srtuggle. Whereas feeling good is what it is... good... and it becomes repeatitive. In other woords its much harder to make good feelings interesting.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Sore Heart

    Yay! People really do like my poem~ Lychee is so happy!
    *Runs around hugging every one.*
    Ah, well... of course it is. Anyone is normally over welmed by sorrow.

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